SURVIVOR: TOCANTINS FANFIC --- Episode 8 Is Finally Up! Please Comment! :)

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Kitty Pryde1		#2141	[-]
Posts: 7858 (12/28/08 6:30 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	I can't wait for it to be posted, but I'm gonna have to wait until after AT's Amazing Race leg ends to read it in its entirety.
guatemala fanfic	Episode going up now!	#2142	[-]
Posts: 4069 (12/28/08 6:34 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	I'm posting it right now, but if people could give me 10-15 minutes to get the text posted in this thread and then the comments, notes, and visibility before posting anything, I would appreciate that! Thanks.
guatemala fanfic	EPISODE 1 - Undisclosed Title	#2143	[-]
Posts: 4070 (12/28/08 6:36 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Episode 1 - Undisclosed Title <A dramatic music plays, as the camera shows a fast-forwarded view of the sun rising over the vast African savannah, and then abruptly fades out to show a clip of two hippos splashing around in a swampy lake. An overhead view of a herd of elephants tromping through the grassland is shown, before the camera cuts ahead to show a close-up view of a gorilla. Several other clips of exotic wildlife and beautiful landscapes flash onto the screen. The camera cuts ahead to show Jeff Probst standing on the edge of a grassy hill, as his name appears in green text on the bottom of the screen> Jeff Probst: I'm in Gabon, a country in west-central Africa, and one of the last untouched places on the planet. <The aerial camera rapidly zooms above a beautiful beach, and then fades out to show a lake dotted with many tree-covered islands> It is here that eighteen Americans have already begun the adventure of a lifetime. <A faraway view of the castaways being led through a grassy valley is then shown> They've been thrust into a land beyond their wildest imaginations, <The camera focuses in on G.C.> and they're about to be divided into two competing tribes. <A wide view of several castaways is shown, before the camera zooms in on Paloma> Left to fend for themselves in the wild wearing nothing but their street clothes, <Both Charlie and Dan are then shown next> they're being led to one of the most remote places in Africa with no idea of the surprises that await. <The camera shows a rapid clip of a marching elephant, and then cuts back to the eighteen castaways again> Jeff Probst: They are strangers from different walks of life: <short pause> a medical sales rep; <The camera now zooms in on Jacquie> a hairdresser from Iowa; <A quick view of Susie is shown> a retired nurse; <The camera scrolls over to Gillian, who is walking behind an African tribesman> a gay lawyer from New York; <A close-up view of an excited Charlie is then shown> an Olympic gold medalist; <Crystal is shown next> a retail sales manager; <The camera switches angles to show Kelly> a high school physics teacher; <A rapid clip of Bob is shown> a wedding videographer from Missouri. <The camera turns to Randy, and then switches angles to show an elephant tromping through the grassland. A wide view of the castaways walking down the grassy hill is then shown> Jeff Probst: There's a music production assistant; <The camera focuses in on Michelle> a pharmaceutical sales rep; <The camera shows Corinne walking at the back of the group, as two tribesmen can be seen behind her> a personal trainer in Los Angeles; <A close-up view of Matty is now shown> a maintenance man and aspiring rap artist. <A side view of the castaways walking is shown, before the camera switches angles to show a front view of G.C.> Jeff Probst: There's a fashion student; <Paloma is shown next> a Boston lawyer; <The camera now scrolls over to Dan> a pin-up model; <A quick clip of Sugar is then shown> a young doctor from Florida; <The camera turns to Marcus> a photographer; <Ace can be seen walking near the front of the group> and a professional video gamer. <The camera now scrolls over to Ken, before zooming out to show another wide view of the eighteen castaways, and then switching angles to show an aerial view of the cirque, where the castaways can be seen walking> Jeff Probst: It is the ultimate challenge. <The African tribesmen can now be seen stopping and pointing ahead, as the castaways continue to walk forward> Eighteen strangers forced to work together to create a new society, <Rapid views of both Charlie and Jacquie are shown> while battling the elements and each other. <The camera now switches angles to show Kelly, Crystal, and Susie walking side-by-side, before zooming out to show the entire group of castaways> Jeff Probst: They must learn to adapt or they'll be voted out of the tribe. <A close-up view of Matty is shown, before the camera turns to both Gillian and Ken> In the end, <Dan is then shown looking around> only one will remain to claim the million dollar prize. <The camera now focuses in on a determined Crystal> This is their story. <Quick clips of several castaways are shown, before the camera abruptly cuts ahead to show a faraway view of the entire group walking through the African grasslands. The music becomes more dramatic and more prominent, as the aerial camera rapidly scrolls ahead to show another view of Jeff standing atop the grassy hill> Jeff Probst: <talking loudly> Thirty-nine days, eighteen people, one *Survivor. <Jeff now holds up one finger, as the aerial camera rapidly zooms out on the cirque and vast grassland and Jeff fades further and further into the distance. The screen then fades into the Opening Credits> Opening Credits: 'Ancient Voices of Gabon' begins to play, as the camera shows a close-up view of the blazing sun shining down on the African grassland, and then abruptly cuts ahead to show a circle of silhouetted tribal dancers. A hippo can be seen emerging from the water and opening its mouth widely, before the Survivor: Gabon* logo flashes onto the screen for a quick second. Two elephants are shown tromping side-by-side, before the camera shows an aerial view of a grassy cirque. The words "18 Castaways" now appear, as the camera shows a rapid clip of the nine Fang tribe members hiking through the grasslands. Their tribe name is then shown on a red challenge flag. The first castaway to be shown is Corinne. A clip of her walking in front of her tribe's hut is shown, before the camera shows a close-up view of a color-enhanced photo of her grinning. Ace is shown using a makeshift "fire bow," as he attempts to start a fire. The camera now cuts ahead to show a medium-sized photo of him with flames flickering around it. A close-up view of a gorilla hanging on to two branches is shown. The camera shows Michelle pointing something out on the map, and then scrolls up to her face. A rapid clip of her smiling in a brightly colored photo is now shown. A rapid clip of an eagle perched watchfully in the treetops is shown next. Gillian is shown, as she walks through a grassy area. A large black-and-white photo of her with water running down it is then shown. The next castaway is Charlie. He is shown carrying an armful of firewood, before the camera abruptly cuts ahead to show a close-up photo of him smiling along the left side of the screen. Dan is then shown tethered to several tribemates, as he runs during the first Immunity Challenge. He is now shown in a faraway black-and-white photo. The camera rapidly zooms in on it, and focuses on it for a second, before fading out to show a hippo with its head half-submerged underwater. Ken can be seen working on repairing his tribe's hut. He is then shown in a medium-sized photo with water running down the left side of it. A clip of Paloma walking during the opening hike is shown. A brightly colored photo of her smiling widely is then shown. The camera shows a close-up view of a smirking Randy, before a large black-and-white photo of him flashes onto the screen, and the camera shows a view of a chimpanzee lumbering along the jungle floor. A fast-forwarded view of the sky is shown, as the clouds rapidly shift around a lone tree and day turns to night. The words "39 Days" appear on the screen, as the camera cuts ahead to show the starry night sky, and then abruptly cuts ahead to show a close-up view of the Kota tribe's yellow challenge flag. The camera shows Bob standing in his tribe's yellow canoe, and then fades out to show a close-up photo of him along the left side of the screen. G.C. is now shown carrying a long tree branch over his shoulder and then tossing it down. A color-enhanced photo of him with one corner burning is shown next. A python striking at the camera is now shown, before the camera shows the next castaway. Kelly can be seen walking alone in a jungle area, before the camera fades out to show a brightly colored photo of her with water running down it along the right side of the screen. A close-up view of Jacquie is shown, as she laughs at something and turns her head. The camera then shows a quick photo of her in the middle of the screen. Marcus is shown carrying a bundle of sticks, as the camera rapidly zooms in on him, and then fades out to show him smiling in a brightly colored photo with flames flickering around it. A close-up view of a leopard is shown next. The camera shows a clip of a determined Crystal running during a challenge. She is then shown in a photo with flames flickering around it. A herd of elephants is then shown roaming through the grasslands, before the camera shows a close-up view of a red river hog. The next castaway is Sugar, who is shown in a quick clip from camp, and then in a color-enhanced photo in the middle of the screen. Matty can now be seen forcefully chopping into a branch with the machete. A large black-and-white photo of him is then shown. An aerial view of several grassy islands is shown, as the camera scrolls around them. The last castaway to be shown is Susie. A close-up view of her emerging from a jungle area is shown, before the camera cuts ahead to show a large black-and-white photo of her. Lightning can be seen streaking across the dark sky. A quick clip of a tribal mask is then shown next. The camera shows a darkened view of the spooky Tribal Council village and scrolls across many shadowy figures and burning torches. The words "1 Survivor" appear on the screen, as the camera shows the silhouette of a castaway standing alone in front of a traditional African hut and holding up a torch triumphantly. Many rapid and indistinguishable images continue to flash onto the screen, before the camera shows the Survivor: Gabon logo and focuses on it for a few seconds. The theme music finishes, as the screen fades out. <An upbeat African chant is heard, as the aerial camera shows a faraway view of the eighteen castaways being led through the vast grassland by the African tribesmen. The camera scrolls around them, and then abruptly switches angles to show a clip of two elephants trumpeting loudly through the grassy valley. A front view of the castaways is now shown again, before the camera zooms in on Crystal, who displays a very focused expression on her face> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: As we were walking through the savannah over to Jeff, I was just in awe. <Crystal can now be seen looking around in astonishment> This is "Ah-fri-cka," you know? <laughs> This is the Motherland, and Africa, to me, feels like home, <The camera now scrolls over to G.C.> so <long pause> the opportunity to come here and win a mil, <laughs> it's a dream come true… <The camera abruptly cuts ahead to show a side view of Randy> Randy - CONFESSIONAL: The game of Survivor was invented for me and yes, I believe I'm the smartest person here. <A view of Dan is shown, before the camera turns to Marcus and Charlie> That doesn't mean I'm gonna win, but it certainly gives me an advantage. <Corinne is shown with a confident grin on her face. Another close-up view of Randy is then shown next> You know, I plan on running the show and I will not think twice about stepping on any of these people's toes or stabbing anybody in the back in order to take what's rightfully mine: <short pause> the million dollars. <A prominent drumbeat is heard, as the camera switches angles to show Ken walking along with several other castaways> Ken - CONFESSIONAL: I'm a professional video game player, and everyone's going to overlook me because I'm small and scrawny. <Paloma is now shown walking beside one of the tribesmen> Like, I might be a little weak compared to all of these other guys, <A clip of Matty and Ace is shown next> but <pause> going into this game as the nerdy Asian guy who plays video games is actually gonna be one of my strengths because they won't actually be trying to take me out… <A close-up view of Ken is shown again, as he looks over at Kelly> Kelly - CONFESSIONAL: I definitely think my looks can be deceiving in this game. <The camera continues to focus on Kelly for a few seconds> Um, some of these people might think I'm just this dumb blonde girl who can't survive in the wilderness <Jacquie is then shown> and can't live without my cell phone, but I'm actually pretty intelligent. <The camera now scrolls across several castaways again, before zooming back in on Kelly> Like, I definitely didn't come all the way out here to lose. <Paloma can then be seen looking over her shoulder> I'm number one, always, and they're gonna have no idea what I'm capable of… <There is another prominent drumbeat, as the camera shows a quick clip of an anxious Jeff, and then switches angles to show a wide view of the eighteen castaways assembling into a group in front of him> Jeff Probst: Welcome to Survivor: Gabon - Earth's Last Eden. <Both Bob and G.C. are shown, before the camera turns to an excited Gillian and then goes back to Jeff> You guys ready to get started? <The cheering castaways now respond with an enthusiastic "Yes!"> Dan: You know it… <Matty is then shown staring ahead, before another view of Jeff is shown> Jeff Probst: Alright; <short pause> first thing we're gonna do is divide into tribes. <Michelle is shown with an anxious look on her face> There's a bag over here for each of you with your name on it. <The camera shows a clip of nine red bags and nine yellow bags in a pile, and then returns to Jeff> Come find your bag; <short pause> put on your buff. <A wide view of the castaways excitedly rushing over to their bags and rifling through the pile is then shown. The camera zooms in on Kelly, who reads the nametag on one of the red bags> Kelly: Ace… <Kelly can be seen handing Ace his bag, as he says "Thank you, darling"> Jeff Probst: If you have yellow, head to the left. <Both Marcus and Jacquie can be seen walking over to the left with yellow bags, as Crystal and G.C. both greet each other> Crystal: <to G.C.> What's up? Oh my goodness… <The camera shows another view of Jeff> Jeff Probst: If you have red, <Dan is shown pulling out his red buff> head over here to the right. <A wide view of several castaways with red bags gathering in a group is shown> Put on your buff… <Indistinct chatter is heard, as the castaways greet each other. Charlie and Dan, who are both dressed in suits, are shown shaking hands and then hugging> Dan: <to Charlie> I see you dressed for the occasion… <laughs> <A close-up view of Randy is now shown, before the camera continues to show the castaways assembling on their respective mats for a few seconds, and then switches angles to show Jeff> Jeff Probst: Okay; <short pause> we have our two tribes. <The camera shows views of several castaways looking around and assessing their tribemates, before returning back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Yellow tribe, your name is Kota. <The camera shows a rapid clip of the entire Kota tribe> We have G.C., <A confident G.C. is shown again, as he nods his head> Kelly, <Kelly can be seen brushing her hair back and then turning her head> Matty, <Matty is shown with a subtle smirk on his face, as he stares ahead> Susie, <A close-up view of Susie is shown next> Crystal, <Crystal is shown with a pensive look on her face> Bob, <The camera then shows Bob smiling> Jacquie, <The camera now scrolls over to Jacquie> Marcus, <A view of both Marcus and Sugar is shown> and Sugar. <Excited chattering can be heard, as the camera scrolls across the nine Kota members again, and then zooms in on Crystal> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: I'm very impressed with the makeup of our tribe. <Another wide view of the entire Kota tribe is shown> We have two of the biggest, strongest dudes; <Rapid clips of Matty, Marcus, and G.C. are shown> I, myself, am an athlete, <The camera focuses back in on a determined Crystal> you know, so <pause> we've definitely got some muscles here. <laughs> I think we're gonna beat the hell out of the other team… <There is a prominent drumbeat, as the camera abruptly cuts back to Jeff again> Jeff Probst: Red tribe, you are Fang. <A wide view of several excited Fang members is shown, before the camera zooms in on Ace, who raises his eyebrows in surprise> Ace - CONFESSIONAL: I am thoroughly embarrassed to be a member of the Fang tribe, pronounced "Fong." <laughs> <The camera continues to focus on Ace for a few seconds> I mean, it was just sortof a disappointment after thinking we were gonna be the mighty "Fang" tribe, <Several Fang members are now shown smiling nervously> which sounds so much more fierce and powerful… <Another view of Jeff is then shown next> Jeff Probst: We have Dan, <Dan is shown with an anxious smile on his face> Corinne, <The camera shows Corinne with a grin on her face> Ken, <Ken is shown putting his red buff around his neck> Ace, <Ace can be seen staring ahead> Gillian, <A close-up view of a smiling Gillian is shown, as she excitedly looks around> Randy, <The camera now turns to a stern-looking Randy> Michelle, <Michelle is shown staring into the distance> Paloma, <The camera scrolls over to Paloma> and Charlie. <Randy can be seen looking around and assessing his tribe> Randy - CONFESSIONAL: First impressions of my tribe: <short pause> I am outnumbered here. It's basically me and one other old broad. <Gillian is then shown next> The rest of 'em, there's a lot of twenty-somethings; <Michelle, Paloma, and Charlie are now shown> there's a lot of what I would call hot chicks and young studs, <The camera then switches angles to show both Dan and Corinne> but, <long pause> I mean, even so, I look around at these people and I don't see any competition. <Another close-up view of a devious Randy is shown> This could actually be easier than I thought. You know, time will tell… <A rapid clip of the nine Kota members is shown again, before the camera focuses back in on Jeff> Jeff Probst: Alright, guys; <short pause> the game is about to begin. <The camera now shows a clip of both tribes listening intently> Waiting behind me, for each tribe, is water, food, and the essential supplies that you're gonna start with. <The camera shows several water canteens, bags of rice, rope, and other supplies on the Fang tribe's red mat> You will also find a map to your new tribe home. <A view of Michelle is shown, before the camera turns back to Jeff> It's up to you to decide as a group which supplies you're going to take <The camera shows Marcus and Jacquie> and what you can carry because it's gonna be a long hike to your camps. <Ace is shown with a thoughtful expression on his face, as he nods his head and mouths "Okay." Another view of Jeff is shown> Also, keep in mind, this could be all the water you get for the next three days because the water at your camp must be boiled, <Crystal can be seen raising her eyebrows, as Jeff pauses> so if you're thinking of doing anything foolish with it, don't. <A close-up view of Corinne is shown, as she nods her head knowingly> Jeff Probst: Fang, <short pause> once you reach the top of the hill, you'll head along the path to the right. <The Fang tribe is shown, as Dan turns his head> Kota, you'll follow the path to the left. <Another view of the entire Kota tribe is then shown, before the camera zooms in on Jacquie> You'll know you're at your camp when you see your tribe's flag… <The camera shows Randy listening intently, and then turns back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Head out, guys! Good luck! <The music immediately speeds up and becomes more dramatic, as the camera shows a wide view of both tribes quickly jogging ahead and then switches to an overhead view of the entire grassland. The camera then cuts ahead to show a view of the nine Kota members arriving at their yellow mat> Jacquie: Okay; here's our group… <Marcus can be seen grabbing a bag of rice and lifting it over his shoulder, before the camera shows a rapid clip of Fang arriving at their supplies. Dan and Ace can then be seen shaking each other's hands> Dan: <to Ace> I'm Dan; nice to meet you… <The camera now shows a side view of Ace> Ace: <to Dan> Dan. How do you do? I'm Ace… <Another wide view of the Kota members gathering their supplies is shown next, before the camera zooms in on Crystal> Crystal: <jokingly> Oh, there better be some flint here or someone's getting killed… <laughs> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: As soon as we got to our mat, I was looking for the flint, okay? <A close-up view of Crystal rifling through the supplies is shown, before the camera shows Kelly raising her eyebrows> You know, I thought maybe we'll get fire, <laughs> but <pause> no; it's like, you're dropped off in the boonies; <Indistinct chatter is heard, as the camera continues to show Kota> you have nothing but the clothes you have on and everything's on you. <The camera shows a clip of the Kota tribe's yellow challenge flag and then scrolls over to Marcus> Marcus: Someone has to carry this… <Bob can be seen grabbing the yellow flag, before the camera zooms out to show the nine Kota members beginning to hike up the grassy hill> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> This is very primitive conditions out here; <short pause> you know, we could die! <laughs> We really could die because there's danger around every corner out here. <laughs> <The camera shows a clip of a chimpanzee hanging high in a tree, and then cuts back to the nine Fang members, as indistinct chatter can be heard> Michelle: This is so crazy! <laughs> It's my first time in Africa! <Charlie can be seen attempting to pick up one of the heavy gourds of water, before the camera shows Dan> Dan: Alright; let's see what we got here… <Randy is then shown turning towards Dan> Randy: <to Dan> I don't even care what it is; <short pause> let's just start grabbing stuff, <An excited Gillian is heard shouting "Oh, corn and rice!"> but <pause> take everything… <Ace can then be seen standing apart from his tribemates with his hands on his hips> Ace: Let's, if we can, grab the water, because we're definitely gonna need that… <An impatient Michelle is then shown standing with several water canteens around her shoulders> Michelle: You guys, the other team already left. Why the hell are we just standing here?! <A wide view of the frantic Fang members is shown, before the camera zooms in on Randy> Randy - CONFESSIONAL: The second we got to our supplies, Michelle, Corinne, and Ace wanted to take a few things and go, <Ace can be heard saying "Just the [inaudible] will be plenty"> and I'm thinkin' "What are you talking about? It's not a race." <Michelle is now shown> Michelle: I say we start going… <Randy can then be seen tensing his expression> Randy - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> You know, we would have had to be complete idiots to not take every last thing on that mat. <Dan can now be seen grabbing one of the gourds of water> A lot of these people are younger than I am; <short pause> they make decisions impulsively <Both Ken and Corinne are shown next> and <pause> I have to just bite my tongue and pretend like I'm along for the ride… <Randy is shown carrying several canteens> Randy: <to Corinne> You need help carrying or are you good? <Corinne says "I'm good" to Randy, as the camera shows her adjusting the bag of corn in her arms> Corinne - CONFESSIONAL: Playing Survivor is not something you would normally find me doing. <The camera continues to focus on Corinne for a few seconds> You know, I really don't care about the experience; <short pause> I don't care about the people. <laughs> <Ace is shown carrying a bag of rice on his back> I'm just here to win the million dollars, and I'm gonna be nasty; I'm gonna be a bitch… <Paloma and Corinne are shown walking beside each other> Corinne: <to Paloma> What's your name again? <The camera now turns to Paloma> Paloma: <to Corinne> Paloma… <Corinne repeats "Paloma" aloud. Indistinct conversation can be heard, as the camera zooms out to show another wide view of the entire Fang tribe> Corinne: <talking aloud> I'm never gonna remember anyone's names… <Corinne is shown> Corinne - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> And I'm already having a hard time too, like, pretending that I care about these people when <short pause> clearly not. <laughs> <Corinne can be seen with a devious smirk on her face> You know, I'll definitely put on a happy face and whatnot, but <pause> I have a feeling I'm not gonna be making very many friends… <laughs> <An upbeat tribal chant is now heard, as the camera shows a fast-forwarded view of the sky and then fades into an aerial view of the vast African savannah before scrolling ahead to a jungle area. The Kota tribe is then shown walking along a jungle path> Matty: Come on! <Marcus, Matty, and G.C. are shown looking back at their slower tribemates> G.C.: Pick it up! Pick it up! <A close-up view of a struggling Susie is then shown next> Come on, Susie! Keep it up! <The camera then zooms back in on Matty again> Matty - CONFESSIONAL: That hike, <short pause> that hike was tough, man, especially for Susie. <Crystal is now shown walking with Susie> I think it was a little harder for her to keep up because, I mean, she's not carrying much extra weight, <Susie can be seen carrying a coiled rope> but, she's not physically fit. <The camera continues to show the Kota members making their way through the jungle> It's uneven terrain; you know, up a hill, down a hill. <A clip of Marcus is then shown> One minute you're in the middle of thick jungle and the next minute you're in open grassland, <The Kota tribe is then shown emerging from the jungle into a more open area> so <pause> I would definitely say that Susie slowed us down a lot on the hike… <A comical music begins to play, as the camera abruptly cuts back to Susie> Susie: Hey, we need to stop for a minute! I have to go to the bathroom! <laughs> <There is a prominent sound, as indistinct conversation can be heard and the camera shows Matty> Matty: <to G.C.> Susie has to go to the bathroom… <Susie can be seen walking into an area of taller grass, as the camera zooms out to show the other Kota members> Susie: If anybody sees, like, a hippo or an elephant, let me know… <Matty is shown again> Matty: <to Susie> Just [inaudible] real quick; <Crystal can be heard saying something inaudible to Matty> ten seconds… <Susie is now shown crouching down in the tall grass, before the camera switches angles to show several of her tribemates standing nearby> Susie - CONFESSIONAL: I felt really silly having to squat down and take a pee break in front of my whole tribe, <The camera continues to show an uncomfortable Susie for a few seconds> and this is twenty minutes in, mind you… <Both Marcus and Matty are now shown down> Matty: <talking loudly> Susie, you almost done?! <Susie is shown standing up cautiously. She then begins to walk back through the tall grass to rejoin her Kota tribemates> Susie - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> It was embarrassing a little bit, <laughs> but when nature calls, it calls, <laughs> <A view of the Kota members beginning to hike again is shown, as Bob can be heard saying "Let's roll"> so I mean, I just hope I'm not called "the one who went to the bathroom on Survivor" because I have to think about my son before I do anything and <short pause> my son'll never live that down… <laughs> <An overhead view of a fast-flowing river surrounded by several lush islands is shown, before the camera scrolls ahead to show a swift waterfall. A forest elephant can then be seen crashing through several trees, before the camera cuts ahead to show the Fang tribe halted in the dense jungle> Michelle: Do you guys know where we're going? Cause I have no idea… <Gillian is shown> Gillian: Is this seeming the right way to everyone? <Dan is then shown with a thoughtful look on his face> I'm just wondering if we took a wrong turn… <The Fang members are shown huddling around their map, as Dan reassuringly says "I'm sure we're not lost"> Randy - CONFESSIONAL: When Michelle opened up the map, the last thing I wanted to hear from her was "I have no idea where we're going," <Michelle can be seen pointing something out on the map, as Ace nods his head> but <long pause> Michelle has the map and it quickly became apparent to me that she doesn't have a clue… <Michelle is shown again> Michelle: <to Ace> So we have to go this way? <The camera zooms in on Ace> Ace: <to Michelle> Well, I can't promise, but that's where I would go… <A close-up view of a pensive Randy is shown, before the camera scrolls across several other Fang members> Michelle: Okay; that's what I thought. <Corinne is then shown> Alright; I can read… <laughs> Corinne: We have to hurry because I want to get to camp before it gets dark… <Ace is shown> Ace: I think we should just start picking up the pace a little. <The camera then scrolls over to several other Fang members, before focusing in on a contemplative Dan again> Dan - CONFESSIONAL: I sortof felt like from minute one that Ace was trying to set himself up as the leader. <Another clip of Ace is shown next> You know, he'd be in the front of the tribe kinda controlling how fast we walked… <Ace is now shown looking back at his tribemates> Ace: Just a little faster is all I ask… <A close-up view of Dan is then shown again> Dan: <to Ace> I like this pace right now; <short pause> I, I think this is the perfect pace right here. <A view of Charlie is shown, as he says "Me too"> We're all [inaudible] kindof in unison… Dan - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> I personally have a lot of good leadership qualities as well, but I'm not sure I would want to be the quote unquote "leader" because those are the guys that get the targets on their backs, <The camera now shows a side view of Michelle, Gillian, and Corinne walking together> but <long pause> I'll definitely help the tribe, you know, in whatever role. <A rapid view of Dan is shown again, before the screen abruptly fades out>
guatemala fanfic		#2144	[-]
Posts: 4071 (12/28/08 6:37 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Fang Tribe - Day 1 <An aerial view of the grassland is now shown, before the camera cuts ahead to show a herd of warthogs racing across the savannah. A faraway view of the nine Fang members walking along a lake is now shown, before the camera shows the flowing water and then fades into a view of Fang's main camp area. Michelle, Dan, Ken, and Ace are shown again> Ken: This looks like a good place to put a camp… <The camera zooms in on Michelle> Michelle - CONFESSIONAL: We checked the map a lot. You know, I'm not bad at maps; I wouldn't say I'm "good," but I think we did pretty well. <A clip of the cheering Fang members arriving at their camp is now shown> Um, I didn't get us lost, <laughs> contrary to what the tribe believes, and <pause> I think we got to our camp quickly. <The camera shows the castaways gathering in front of their flag> It didn't take that long! <Ace is then shown next> Ace: Let's just set our equipment down and go for a tour… <A wide view of the exhausted Fang members setting their supplies down is shown, before the camera zooms in on Dan> Dan: Oh, man! You guys look beat… <The camera continues to focus on Dan> Dan - CONFESSIONAL: I definitely think the common perceptions of Africa are that it's kindof this dry, barren, you know, desertous land, <An aerial view of the beautiful lake is now shown again> but <pause> that's really not the case at all. Um, our camp is actually situated right next to a lake, <The camera shows all nine castaways standing on the wooden dock> so as far as day-to-day living, access to water and fish, um, <short pause> it's great. <A prominent sound is heard, as the camera abruptly cuts ahead to show the entire tribe gathered in a group> Dan: Alright; so while we're all here, let's make a pact right now: <The camera zooms in on Randy> we work our asses off together, we stay unified, <A quick view of Michelle is shown next> and whatever's said at Tribal Council stays at Tribal Council… <Ace is then shown> Ace: Tribal Council?! Who said anything about Tribal Council?! <laughs> <A few nervous laughs are heard, as the camera shows a wide view of several Fang members> We're not even gonna have to go to Tribal Council! <A slightly uneasy Dan then says "Alright"> Dan - CONFESSIONAL: Being on Fang, um, the first thing we did as a tribe was make a pact to each other to pull together as a solid team and stay unified, <The Fang members can be seen putting their hands together in a circle> and I think that'll help when we have to come together in challenges. I really do. <Dan is then shown smiling> Um, we've definitely got a great tribe, so <long pause> I think one of us is gonna take it… <The screen fades out> Kota Tribe - Day 1 <'Way of the Island' plays, as the camera shows a faraway view of the nine Kota members walking through an open grassland, and then switches angles to show an aerial view of their nearby camp area. The camera then cuts back to the castaways, before zooming in on G.C.> G.C.: Look for the flag, man… <A close-up view of the Kota tribe's yellow flag is then shown, before the camera goes back to an excited Sugar> Sugar: <excitedly> There's the flag! I see it up ahead! <Jacquie now says "Let's get there"> Crystal: Oh yes, oh my gosh! It's right there! <The camera cuts ahead to show the nine joyful Kota members walking over to their flag and setting their supplies down> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: We were so excited just to see our flag. <Bob is shown, as he says "Good job"> We had been walking for so long in the heat, with supplies, <laughs> that by the time we got to camp, we were so exhausted, <Matty can be seen taking a drink of water from his canteen> but <long pause> we definitely can't just sit back and take a break and catch our breath. <Another view of the Kota tribe is shown, as Sugar says "This is crazy!"> No; there's plenty of work to be done if we're gonna beat Fang … <Jacquie is then shown again> Jacquie: What do you say we do first? <The camera now scrolls over to a smiling Sugar> Sugar: I think we need a tribe motto! <laughs> You know, we need to bond! <laughs> <The camera switches angles to show Susie raising her eyebrows> Susie - CONFESSIONAL: When we walked into camp for the very first time, I think Sugar definitely stood out; <Sugar is now shown laughing and cheering> I mean, she's so positive and energetic, but <long pause> I think we really need to remain focused on goals, <Marcus is now shown carrying an armful of firewood> and "Let's think of what our team motto is," you know, "Let's build up some team spirit," that's nice because we definitely need that, but <long pause> that can come around a campfire. <A clip of both Sugar and Jacquie is shown next> Sugar: <cheering> Ko-ta! Ko-ta! <laughs> <The camera now shows Jacquie smiling> Jacquie: <to Sugar> Oh my god; you're awesome! <laughs> <Susie says "Oh, I'm excited!"> Susie - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> You know, that's not shelter; <short pause> that's not water, and I think that needs to be our priority in a survival situation… <'The Gathering' begins to play, as the camera shows Crystal carrying a bundle of leaves for the roof> Crystal: We need to fix these huts up, you guys… <G.C. now breaks a stick over his knee> G.C.: <talking loudly> Let's pimp it up! <Rapid clips of several Kota members working around camp is shown, before the camera focuses in on Crystal, who is carrying more leaves> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: I won an Olympic gold medal in the 2004 Olympic Games in the women's 4 x 4 100 m relay. <The camera continues to show Crystal for a few seconds> I have no experience outdoors whatsoever, and this is like straight-up elements, <laughs> so <long pause> I signed up for an adventure and that's exactly what I'm gonna get… <laughs> <A clip of Crystal dragging a heavy log in front of the hut is shown, before the camera turns to Kelly> Kelly - CONFESSIONAL: Crystal, she's a tough girl, as far as like physically strong. <Crystal is shown chopping into a branch> Like, compared to me, she's huge, so she definitely strikes me as someone who could kick some serious butt in this game. <Kelly is shown again> She's probably gonna be my biggest competition, so I'm definitely gonna have to watch her… <A wide view of several Kota members is shown, as Crystal hands a bundle of leaves to Bob> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: I'm 6'3", okay?! <laughs> I look threatening; I look intimidating. I know I stick out, and <long pause> it does put me out there very quickly. <Crystal and Susie can be seen high-fiving each other> In real life, it is part of my personality to be a leader, so I have to kindof tone that down. <A clip of Bob layering leaves onto the roof of the hut is shown> Bob: What do you think, Crystal? <Crystal can be seen looking up at Bob> Crystal: <to Bob> You're doing great, so <long pause> I'm not even gonna tell you. <Bob now laughs at something> Do it your way… <laughs> <Another view of Crystal is shown next> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> I'm not gonna be trying to take control. <Sugar and Jacquie are shown gathering sticks and twigs> When we get to having to vote people off, then I'll be the ringleader, <laughs> but as of right now, I just want to get our camp done. <laughs> <Crystal claps her hands several times, as the camera shows her tribemates looking around> Crystal: We have to work on the fire. <Marcus is shown plowing a stick against a flattened log> Susie: <to Marcus> Here, I'll blow on it… <Susie can be seen crawling in front of the fire pit, as she gently blows on the kindling. Kelly is then shown holding a few twigs> Kelly: I don't understand how that's gonna start fire, dude. <An unimpressed Crystal is shown with one hand on her hip> Don't we need like a flint thing with the machete? <Kelly is shown> Kelly - CONFESSIONAL: Coming into the game, I thought it was gonna be easy, but it's definitely not. <laughs> <Kelly can now be seen holding a piece of wood, as Bob spins a stick into a small notch> It's a lot more of a challenge than I expected. Like, I definitely thought we were gonna have fire no problem, but <pause> nope. We don't even have a flint yet… <The camera switches angles to show Marcus, Susie, and Bob around the fire pit again> Susie: Oh, man; this is gonna take all day… <An exhausted Marcus is then shown taking a deep breath and wiping his forehead, as the camera zooms in on him> Marcus: Holy crap. <Susie says "Good try," before the camera shows Kelly sitting nearby> Kelly - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> Um, my worst fear at the moment is not getting the fire started; <G.C. can be seen frantically scraping a stick against a log> not being able to eat or stay warm at night, so <long pause> I definitely think it's gonna be a challenge just to survive. I don't know what I was getting myself into… <Several Kota members are then shown> Crystal: Come on, Jesus, help us! We gotta get some fire… <Several prominent drumbeats are heard, as the camera shows a close-up view of a worried Crystal. The screen then fades out> Fang Tribe - Day 1 <'Rejoicing' plays, as the aerial camera scrolls above the dense jungle and then shows a bird soaring above it, before fading into an overhead clip of a leopard sprinting through the grassland. A faraway view of the Fang tribe's flag is then shown, before the camera abruptly cuts ahead to show several castaways gathered in their main camp area> Ace: So we'll have the fire pit there <Ace can be seen pointing to a spot on the ground> and lay benches all the way around the perimeter. <Dan is then shown nodding his head> Charlie - CONFESSIONAL: Teamwork is an absolute necessity in Survivor, I believe. <The camera shows Michelle uncoiling a piece of twine> We really are working hard and surprisingly, we're getting along really well… <laughs> <The camera now turns back to Ace> Ace: Is it gonna be big enough if we go just a few feet around? <The camera shows Corinne> Corinne: <to Ace> I think [inaudible] feet should be fine… <Ace is then shown again> Ace: Well, are we gonna want a little more space? <Ace can be heard saying "I mean, you tell me," before the camera switches angles to show another view of Charlie> Charlie - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> Even the people like Ace and Corinne, they're really starting to come around and letting us feel like more of a tribe. <Ace and Randy are now shown working on the fire pit> We're so diverse; <short pause> like, we have a nurse; <A close-up view of Gillian is shown> we have two lawyers; <Both Charlie and Dan are shown> we have a video game pro, <A rapid clip of Ken is shown next> and <short pause> this is definitely a group effort… <The camera now cuts ahead to show Randy, Ace, and Dan> Randy: <to Dan> So what's the plan? <Dan says something inaudible> Where do you want to build it? Up there? <The camera then zooms in on Ace, who turns towards Randy> Ace: <to Randy> The fire should be built relatively where we're gonna keep it… <Dan can be heard asking "Will you hand that to me?" before Randy hands him the machete> Randy: <to Ace> Well, right, but <pause> we also need to be able to get the sun. <There is a prominent sound, as the camera cuts ahead to show a view of several clouds shifting in front of the red-orange sun. Gillian can then be seen holding her glasses over dry kindling> Randy: <to Gillian> This is the most sun we've had, but I don't know if it's up high enough… Gillian: <to Randy> I wonder if there's a secret to this; <short pause> I wonder if there's a certain angle that gets the sunlight more efficiently… <A disinterested Randy says "Beats me"> Randy - CONFESSIONAL: I have glasses; <short pause> Gillian has glasses. <Gillian is shown holding up her glasses, as she exclaims "This is not working right!"> In a perfect world, we'd take advantage of this sun, but the problem is we're not getting anywhere near enough sunlight, <The camera shows a close-up view of a discouraged Randy> so we're having to rely on A) Ace's meditation, <A comical sound is heard, as the camera shows Ace stretching his arms out> or B) Dan's shoestring fire method, <Dan can be seen using his shoestrings to make a fire bow> which, to be honest, are not gonna produce anything… <The camera continues to focus on Dan for a few seconds, before scrolling back over to Randy> Randy: <to Dan> I'm not trying to be negative, but <long pause> you understand, that's never gonna work… <A view of Dan is shown with an undeterred smile on his face> Dan: <to Randy> No, that's fine… <laughs> <The camera shows another view of Randy> Randy: <to Dan> I mean, try, <Dan says "Right"> but don't get your hopes up. <A view of the sun shining down is shown, before the camera fades out to show Dan spinning the fire bow> Dan - CONFESSIONAL: The technique that we're using to make fire was my idea. <A close-up view of a determined Dan is shown> Um, it's definitely not panning out the way I wanted it to, <laughs> but <long pause> on the other hand, nobody has come up with a more practical idea, <The camera now cuts ahead to show Ace in a meditation stance> so I guess I'm the "out-of-the-box" thinker of the group… <laughs> <Another clip of Dan and Randy is shown> Dan: <to Randy> See? Now look. <Randy can be heard asking "What?"> Feel that; <short pause> I bet you it's hot… <The camera shows Randy feeling the flattened piece of wood> Randy: <to Dan> Well, it's hot, but it's not smoking hot… <The camera now zooms out to show a wide view of the Fang tribe's main camp area, before focusing in on a watchful Corinne> Corinne: <to Dan> Okay, we trust you; make it happen… <Corinne is shown again> Corinne - CONFESSIONAL: I wouldn't know how to light a fire, literally, if someone held a gun to my head, <The camera cuts back to Dan, who continues to slide the fire bow back-and-forth> so to have someone like Dan who's willing to step up and try and make it happen was amazing, and <pause> he gave it a valiant effort, I must say… <'Upon This Hill' begins to play, as the camera shows a worn-out Dan setting the makeshift fire bow down and standing up> Dan: <talking aloud> Ugh, where are the Fire Gods when you need them?! <laughs> <The camera now zooms out to show both Randy and Gillian> Gillian: <to Dan> You know what? You gave it your best shot… <The camera returns to Dan> Dan - CONFESSIONAL: I spent hours today trying to make fire. Hours. <A disappointed Dan can be seen frowning> You know, it's frustrating and I'm my own worst critic anyhow, so the thought of giving up before the job is done just drives me insane. <laughs> <Gillian is shown> Gillian: <to Dan> Hey, we'll get it tomorrow… <Another view of Dan is shown next> Dan: <to Gillian> I'm, like, beating myself up over this. <The camera continues to show Dan> Dan - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> I don't like to admit defeat, but at least I tried. <The camera now scrolls down to show Dan's fire bow> You know, I don't think that makes me an ineffective "leader" or an ineffective member of this team; not at all, <A wide view of several Fang members is shown> but <long pause> so unfortunately Fang spent our, um, first night on Survivor with no fire, <pause> and it sucks… <laughs> <The screen abruptly fades out> Fang Tribe - Day 2 <A fast-forwarded view of the clouds shifting in the dark night sky is shown, before the camera shows the full moon, and then fades out to show the sun rising on the morning of Day 2. The camera then cuts ahead to show several Fang members lying awake in their hut> Corinne: I'm so happy the sun's up. <Corinne sits up, as the camera zooms in on her> Like, I've never been so happy for daytime in my life… <Gillian can now be seen rubbing her eyes> Gillian: That wood really hurts the ol' butt, doesn't it?! <laughs> <Corinne is then shown> Corinne: It's cold and it's hard ground… <The camera now abruptly cuts ahead to show Randy standing in the shallow lake waters and rubbing water onto his face> Randy - CONFESSIONAL: It's the second day of the game. You know, I think we got through our first night with only a moderate amount of discomfort. <A groggy Michelle can be seen climbing out of the hut> Um, no fire; <short pause> we slept nine of us in a broken-down hut just laying on the floor, so <long pause> did it sleep like a Serta? No, but can we deal with being a little uncomfortable? I think so… <Corinne is shown drinking the last bit of water from her canteen, before the camera zooms out to show several castaways standing by the hut> Corinne: I can, like, feel the dehydration… <The camera then scrolls over to Gillian> Gillian: Well, I'd like to get some water even to wash with, nevermind for drinking purposes… Ace: We don't even know where we have to get our water yet. <Michelle is then shown> Michelle: <to Corinne> Do you know where it is? <Corinne is shown turning towards Michelle> Corinne: No, but <long pause> we'll at least see where it is and if it looks bad. <Dan says "Just be careful"> We won't bring any back unless it looks clean enough to filter it. <Ace is shown> Ace - CONFESSIONAL: Corinne and Michelle decided they were gonna go get water this morning and maybe try to filter it because we're all feeling a little dehydrated… <Michelle can be seen with several canteens strung across her shoulder> Michelle: Do you guys have the map? <Randy now hands the water map to Michelle> Randy: <jokingly> Don't get lost… <A comical sound is heard, as Michelle makes a face> Michelle: <annoyedly> I didn't get us lost! <The camera switches angles to show Ace again> Ace - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> Now, um, this is the same Michelle that couldn't read a map yesterday. <Corinne and Michelle are shown walking through the jungle> You know, they might never come back… <laughs> <The camera shows Corinne looking down at the map> Michelle: <to Corinne> I think it's farther back on this path… <Corinne and Michelle continue to walk ahead, before the camera scrolls ahead to show the water well in a jungle clearing> Corinne: <excitedly> Oh my gosh! <Corinne can now be seen clapping excitedly> Corinne - CONFESSIONAL: Oh, I was ecstatic to find our water. Are you kidding?! It's an actual well and not in a little pond somewhere with, like, a few inches of murky swamp water… <Corinne lifts the lid off of the well, as she says "Ew" and the camera zooms in on the water> Michelle: That stuff is nasty… <The camera shows another clip of both Michelle and Corinne> Corinne - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> You know, it still looks kindof like a scum hole water pit with a bunch of diseases in it, <Corinne dips a canteen into the water, as she says "I so don't wanna drink this"> and <pause> we're definitely gonna have to boil it; at least filter it, but <long pause> at least it's not in some elephant's toilet that animals are gonna [censored] in. You know, thanks for that… <There is a prominent drumbeat, as the screen fades out> Kota Tribe - Day 2 <'Slow and Easy' plays, as the overhead camera rapidly zooms above several jagged limestone cliffs, and then fades out to show two hippos half-submerged in a swampy lake. An aerial view of the Kota tribe's main camp area is then shown, before the camera cuts ahead to show their flag. An exhausted Susie can now be seen sitting down beside Sugar on a log> Susie: <talking aloud> Oh, mercy… <Marcus is then shown standing in front of the fire pit> Marcus: If you guys could have one thing right now, what would it be? <Matty is now shown> Matty: <to Marcus> I would have done anything for a blanket, dude… <The camera then switches angles to show a side view of both Crystal and G.C.> Crystal: Y'all, we need to go on a serious food hunt today… <Susie is heard saying "I know"> Susie - CONFESSIONAL: In the last 24 hours, all we've had to eat or drink is some water from the canteens. <Jacquie can be seen taking a drink of water> You know, we can't cook rice because we haven't started fire, so <pause> there's gotta be, you know, fruit or nuts around here somewhere, so <long pause> I went out with Crystal… <Crystal and Susie can now be seen walking on the fringe of a forested area> Susie: <to Crystal> Just keep your eyes open cause a lot of times there could be fruit and you can't see 'em… <Crystal can be seen looking up at the treetops, as she says "I know this"> Crystal: <to Susie> We have to find something. <An eerie shift in the music now occurs, as there is an extended silence and the camera zooms back in on a contemplative Susie> Susie: <to Crystal> You know, I think there's no other bonds that are this tight out here except for you and me. <The camera then switches angles to show Crystal nodding her head> Crystal: <to Susie> Well, I already know I trust you more than anyone else… <Susie smiles> Susie: <to Crystal> I'm comfortable being with you, <Crystal says "Yeah"> and maybe one other person because I think we're gonna need numbers if we have to go to Tribal Council… Susie - CONFESSIONAL: I could just feel that I had an immediate bond with Crystal as far as us both being moms, <A close-up view of Crystal is now shown next> and <long pause> I think she feels the same about me, so that's kindof the one person I made an alliance with right away because I need an alliance, I feel like… <The camera turns to show Crystal again> Crystal: <to Susie> We're cool, right? <Susie is now shown smiling and nodding her head> Susie: <to Crystal> Yeah. The only way our alliance would break is if you wanted to get rid of me, <Crystal is shown, as she says "No" and Susie pauses> because I'm with you 100%. So if anything happens, just tell me… <Crystal then says "It's done"> Susie - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> Obviously I'd rather not have to go to Tribal Council, but if we do, at least I have her to kindof watch my back… <Crystal and Susie can now be seen walking back towards camp together, as they continue to speak and laugh> Susie: <to Crystal> That makes me feel so much better. <laughs> <There is a prominent drumbeat, as the camera continues to focus on Susie, before the screen fades out> Fang Tribe - Day 3 <'Little Divas' plays, as the camera shows a silhouetted view of a lone tree and the sun can be seen rising behind it. A family of elephants are then shown splashing through a shallow lake, before the camera cuts ahead to show Ace, Charlie, and Corinne walking towards Fang's treemail basket. The camera then zooms in on a wooden box inside of the red basket> Corinne: <excitedly> Oh, check it out! What is this?! <Charlie can now be seen pulling out the wooden box, as Ace says "Dun, dun, dun." The camera abruptly cuts back to Fang's main camp area to show the other castaways gathered around their shelter> Ace: <talking loudly> Hey, guys; we have mail! <Gillian can be seen clapping excitedly> Dan: Read! <The camera now focuses in on Corinne for a few seconds, as she opens up the wooden box and reads the treemail message aloud to her tribemates> Corinne: You're only three days in, and you're hungry and you're tired; You're thirsty without water, and you're cold without a fire. Well, it's Kota vs. Fang; only one tribe gets the flame. If you're not the first to finish, you may be the first to leave the game. <The camera shows rapid clips of several Fang members, and then focuses in on Ace> Ace: I have an idea that I'd like to throw out for the challenge: <An interested Dan can now be seen looking up> when we go in there, let's tell them that we have fire <The camera now shows Corinne again> because I think every mental advantage that we can have over them for this Immunity Challenge is gonna help us win, <The camera then zooms out to show all nine Fang members> and I think fire is the biggest one right now… <A view of Charlie is shown> Charlie - CONFESSIONAL: If I were Ace right now, I definitely wouldn't want anyone to know on Day Three that I'm willing to lie to win the game, or that I'm gonna be so cutthroat <The camera focuses back in on Ace> because that's gonna make people in the tribe not trust him… Corinne: If we can "one-up" them… <Another close-up view of Ace is then shown next> Ace: Well, especially if they don't have fire. <Corinne says "Yeah, exactly"> If they do, I mean, we don't want to give them the satisfaction of knowing we don't have it yet… <Ace can be seen shrugging carelessly, before the camera switches angles to show a thoughtful-looking Charlie> Charlie - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> I would definitely say Ace either made a really good move or a really bold stupid move <laughs> just because we don't know each other that well yet… <The camera now shows the nine Fang members cheering "One, two, three, Fang!"> Ace - CONFESSIONAL: Survivor is one huge mind game. It's like a chess game of human interaction, and <pause> you have to be "Game on" from the start. <Gillian and Michelle can both be seen examining the treemail box> I mean, not using lies and deceit and manipulation to win this game is like not collecting your $200 when you pass "Go" on Monopoly. It's just that little something extra that gets you to the top, <A clip of the nine Fang members walking out of camp is now shown> and <long pause> I always come out on top, because I know my strengths… <A prominent drumbeat is heard, as the screen abruptly fades out>
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Posts: 4072 (12/28/08 6:39 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Immunity Challenge - Puzzle It Out <A dramatic music plays, as the camera shows an aerial view of a grassy valley and then rapidly zooms ahead to the challenge area. Rapid clips of each of the obstacles are now shown, before the camera abruptly cuts ahead to show a close-up view of Jeff> Jeff Probst: <talking loudly> Come on in, guys! <The camera switches angles to show a side view of the nine Kota members walking in to the challenge area, and then scrolls across each of the castaways. A front view of the nine Fang members walking towards their red tribal mat is now shown, before the camera zooms in on both Charlie and Randy, and then switches to an overhead view of the entire challenge area. A wide view of both tribes assembling on their respective mats is then shown, before the camera focuses back in on Jeff> Jeff Probst: So, let's talk about the first three days. <The camera scrolls back over to the Kota tribe> Marcus, <short pause> how'd you guys do with fire? <A view of Marcus is shown next> Marcus: Um, we got some smoke, Jeff… <laughs> <There is a prominent sound, as the camera shows Ace with a delighted grin on his face, as Bob adds "But no fire"> Jeff Probst: How about Fang? <A wide view of the confident Fang members is then shown, as they all clap and applaud and indistinct chatter can be heard. A close-up view of Susie is shown, before the camera shows a surprised Jeff raising his eyebrows> Jeff Probst: You got fire? <Ace is shown with a subtle smirk on his face, as he nods> Ace: We have fire, Jeff; yes… <There is a prominent drumbeat, as the camera shows Charlie shifting his expression uncomfortably, and then turns back to Jeff again> Jeff Probst: Reaction, Sugar? Fang made fire… <A close-up view of a smiling Sugar is shown> Sugar: I'm impressed, <laughs> but <pause> we're gonna fight even harder now… <Sugar can be seen looking towards the confident Fang tribe, before the camera shows Ace shifting his expression, and then cuts back to an unfazed Crystal> Crystal: We'll get fire today when we win, so <long pause> I'm not even gonna bat an eye. <A prominent drumbeat is heard, as the camera returns to Jeff again> Jeff Probst: Alright; <short pause> you guys ready to get to your first challenge? <Another wide view of both tribes is shown, as the castaways respond with an enthusiastic "Yes!"> Jeff Probst: For today's challenge, six tribe members will be belted together. <The camera fades out to show red belts around several Fang members' waists> You will race through a swamp, <A rapid clip of several castaways running through knee-deep water is shown> up and over a 15' A-frame wall, <The camera now scrolls around a yellow wall> and under a bamboo crawl. <A wide view of the bamboo crawl is then shown next> You'll then dig up three bags of puzzle pieces, <The camera shows an aerial view of a sand pit, before cutting ahead to show a female castaway unearthing a red puzzle bag> crawl under one final gate, <The Kota tribe's wooden gate is shown next> and make your way to the finish, where the three remaining tribe members will use those pieces to solve a puzzle. <Rapid clips of Fang's puzzle in various stages of completion are shown. The camera then returns to Jeff> First tribe to solve it correctly wins the challenge. <Jacquie is now shown with an excited look on her face> Jeff Probst: Wanna get a look at the Immunity Idol? <Gillian can be seen nodding her head> Gillian: Absolutely… <Jeff can now be seen removing the cloth cover from the Immunity Idol> Jeff Probst: This is the most important thing in this game. <A quick clip of a thoughtful-looking Dan is then shown> When you have this in your possession, you cannot be voted out of this game. <The camera shows a close-up view of G.C., as he subtly nods his head> Without it, you are vulnerable. <Susie is then shown listening intently, before the camera returns to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Winning tribe gets Immunity, and winning tribe gets flint, <Charlie can now be seen grinning excitedly> so Fang, you win today, you keep them another day without fire. <Another wide view of the entire Fang tribe is shown, as Ace can be seen nodding dramatically. A rapid clip of Crystal is then shown, before the camera turns back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Worth playin' for? <The camera shows another view of both tribes, as the castaways clap and respond with an enthusiastic "Yes!"> Jeff Probst: Losers going to Tribal Council tonight; <Jeff takes a short pause, as the camera shows the nine Kota members> somebody will be the first person voted out. <Corinne is shown with an uneasy look on her face, before the camera abruptly cuts back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: I'll give you a minute to strategize; <short pause> we'll get started. <A tribal chant is heard, as the camera shows a close-up view of the Immunity Idol and then fades out to show a wide view of the three puzzle builders for each tribe> Jeff Probst: <narration> Alright; <short pause> so it's Paloma, Gillian, and Ken solving the puzzle for Fang. <A clip of the three Fang members strategizing is shown, before the camera scrolls over to Sugar, Bob, and Susie for Kota> For Kota, it is Susie, Sugar, and Bob… <The camera now zooms in on an anxious Sugar, who displays an uneasy look on her face> Sugar: This is so nerve-wracking… <laughs> <The camera now shows Jeff raising his arm> Jeff Probst: <talking loudly> Here we go! <Rapid views of both tribes at their starting mats are then shown> For Immunity and fire! <Jeff can now be seen raising his arm> It is the first challenge of Survivor: Gabon! Survivors ready?! <The camera now turns to Crystal> Crystal: You know we are! <laughs> <The camera goes back to Jeff, as he lowers his arm> Jeff Probst: <shouting> GO! <A wide view of both tribes immediately racing forward is shown, before the camera switches to an aerial view of the challenge area, and the castaways make their way towards the swamp. A front view of the Kota tribe is now shown next> Crystal: Go, go, go, go! <The camera then scrolls over to the Fang members, as they trudge through the knee-deep water, and the camera continues to show them for a few seconds> Jeff Probst: <narration> Everybody dead even into the swamp! <Indistinct shouting and cheering is heard, as the camera zooms out to show both tribes> Jeff Probst: <narration> Gotta stick together! <Rapid clips of several Kota members are shown, as they reach the other end of the swamp> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota through first! <Corinne is then heard shouting "Come on, guys! Push it!"> Fang right behind! <The camera then turns back to the six Fang members> Michelle: Pick it up, Fang! <A close-up view of Dan is shown, as he leads his tribemates> Dan: We're right behind them… <The camera now cuts ahead to show the Kota tribe arriving at their wall and beginning to make their way up the steep incline> Jeff Probst: <narration> The next leg is a 15' wall! <The camera continues to focus on Kota, and then scrolls over to the Fang tribe, as they begin to climb up the wall> Gillian: <shouting> Go Fang! <The Fang members quickly scale their inclined wall> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang is now gaining on Kota! <Excited cheers can be heard, as the camera focuses on Ace, Randy, and Michelle> Don't waste this lead! <Kelly and Jacquie are now shown climbing over the top of the wall for Kota> Jeff Probst: <narration> All six tribe members gotta get up and over! <The six Kota members can then be seen racing down the backside of their wall, with Fang close behind them. Another overhead view of the entire challenge area is shown, as both tribes race towards the crawl> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota still with the lead at the crawl under! <A side view of the frantic Kota members quickly crawling under the wooden posts is shown> Kelly: Let's go, Kota! We got this! <A front view of the Fang members moving under the crawl-through is then shown, before the Kota tribe reaches the end of the obstacle first> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota through the crawl-through first! <Jacquie is now shown> Jacquie: Come on, Kota! <Another view of Fang is shown next, before the camera zooms in on a worn-out Randy, as his tribemates continue to crawl under the crawl-through> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang bringin' it up! <Dan can be heard shouting something inaudible> Let's move, Fang! <The camera now shows the tiring Kota members arriving at their sand pit, as they immediately begin to dig through the dirt> Jeff Probst: <narration> You're looking for three bags of puzzle pieces, <A close-up view of G.C. is shown, as he digs> buried in different places… <The six Fang members can then be seen arriving at their sand pit, as they spread out and begin to dig> Jeff Probst: <narration> Both tribes are dead even! <The camera now focuses in on both Marcus and Matty> It's gonna take a little bit of luck now! <A wide view of the entire Kota tribe is shown next> Who will find their bags first?! <A prominent sound is heard, as the camera abruptly cuts ahead to show Corinne pulling out one of Fang's bags> Corinne: <excitedly> You guys, I got one! I got one! <The camera scrolls back over to Kota> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang has their first bag of puzzle pieces! <Matty can be heard shouting "Keep digging!" before the camera zooms in on Jacquie> Jacquie: Over here! <Jacquie can then be seen unearthing one of Kota's yellow bags, before Marcus helps her to pull it up out of the dirt> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota finds their first bag! <A disillusioned Dan is then shown next> Dan: <talking aloud> Different spot… <The camera then zooms out to show the entire Fang tribe, as the six castaways continue to dig frantically> Jeff Probst: <narration> Dan pulling up a lot of dirt, but no luck! <Dan then moves to a new location in the sand pit> Gonna try a new spot! <An aerial view of both tribes digging is shown> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang now has a huge hole! <The camera cuts ahead to show a close-up view of Ace, as he uncovers the second red bag for Fang> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang has their second bag of puzzle pieces! <Michelle is shown> Michelle: One more! <The camera then scrolls back over to the struggling Kota members> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota really struggling! <G.C. is shown digging as fast as he can> You do not want to fall apart here! <Dirt can be seen caving back in on Kota's hole, as indistinct shouting is heard. The camera then zooms in on a frustrated Matty> Matty: <shouting> Watch! This is caving back in! <Crystal is heard saying "Watch your feet"> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota's dirt is falling back into their hole faster than they can clear it! <A wide view of the six Kota members is shown, as more dirt pours back down into their hole. The camera then zooms in on Crystal, as she frantically pushes the falling dirt out> Crystal: <to Kelly> Watch your feet 'cause it's pouring back in… <There is a prominent sound, as the camera cuts ahead to show a tiring Kelly continuing to dig> Kelly: <to Crystal> I'm not even kicking it… <Matty can be heard shouting "Just dig!" before the camera switches angles to show the Fang members digging for their final bag> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang lookin' for one more bag before they move on! <Randy is then shown, as he pulls Fang's third bag of puzzle pieces out of the dirt> Randy: Got it! <The six Fang members scramble to their feet and run forward> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang has their third and final bag of puzzle pieces. <The camera shows a rapid clip of the frustrated Kota members> They're moving on to the gate! <A side view of the Fang members moving ahead is shown, before the camera goes back to Kota> Jeff Probst: <narration> Let's go, Kota! You're falling behind! <More dirt can be seen falling back into Kota's hole, before the camera zooms in on Kelly> Kelly: Why does this keep collapsing?! <A prominent drumbeat is heard, as the camera switches angles to show the six Fang members arriving at their wooden gate> Jeff Probst: <narration> Gotta dig a hole big enough for all six tribe members to get under that wall! <The camera continues to focus on the Fang members for a few seconds, as they begin to dig under the wall. A clip of Gillian, Ken, and Paloma is shown next> Paloma: <shouting> Yeah, Fang! <The camera now turns back to the Kota tribe again> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota still tryin' to find the remaining two bags! <Crystal can be seen pushing dirt of the hole, as she unearths another bag> There's one of 'em! <Crystal is shown> Crystal: Keep going, guys! We still got a chance! <A rapid view of the digging Fang members is shown, before the camera focuses back in on Kota, and Marcus finds the final bag> Marcus: Right here! <Marcus can be heard saying "Don't give up," as he pulls the bag out of the dirt and the exhausted Kota members scramble back onto their feet> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota is finally getting back in on this challenge! <The camera shows the Kota members racing towards their final gate, and then cuts back to Fang again> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fire and Immunity on the line! <Rapid views of each of the six Fang members digging under the gate are then shown> Dan: Let's go; <short pause> we're halfway there! <The camera now zooms in on Randy> Jeff Probst: <narration> The one place you don't want to be tonight is Tribal Council… <The worn-out Kota members are now shown arriving at their gate, as they begin to dig> Jeff Probst: <narration> Exhaustion setting in for both tribes! <A tired Michelle can be seen digging, before the camera shows Kelly weakly pushing the dirt out of the way> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kelly barely makin' a dent in that sand… <Crystal now turns her head> Crystal: <to Kelly> Get out of the way… <Crystal can be seen pushing Kelly's hands out of the way, and then digging frantically in the spot where Kelly previously was> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kelly gonna hang back and let her tribemates do the digging. <A clip of a dirt-covered Kelly sitting back is shown next> That's gonna cost Kota… <Excited shouting and cheering is heard, as the Fang members begin to slide under their wooden gate> Jeff Probst: <narration> Ace tryin' to pull himself through! <Ace now slides out from under the gate, before the camera zooms in on Corinne, and then shows all six castaways> Jeff Probst: <narration> Everyone's through for Fang! <The Fang members now climb back onto their feet> You gotta get back to the mat, then you can start working on the puzzle! <An aerial view of the challenge area is shown, as the Fang members reach their red mat> Jeff Probst: <narration> Go, Fang! Start solving it! <Gillian, Ken, and Paloma can be seen grabbing the bags of puzzle pieces from their tribemates and then dumping them out> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang still with the lead on Kota heading in to the final leg of this challenge! <The camera shows the Kota members continuing to dig under their gate, before focusing back in on the Fang members, as they set several pieces of the puzzle into place> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang working together well on their puzzle! <Randy is then shown> Randy: <shouting> Yeah! Let's go, Fang! <Paloma sets the final piece of the first puzzle into place, as her other tribemates can be heard cheering> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang has the first third of their puzzle solved! <Gillian can be heard saying "Another bag!" as Ken dumps out the second bag of puzzle pieces> Got two more bags! <The Kota members can be seen digging under their gate in the distance, before the camera shows the three Fang members making progress on their second puzzle> Jeff Probst: <narration> Gillian, Ken, and Paloma makin' quick work of it! <Ace is now shown> Ace: Come on! <The camera now shows Paloma dumping out the third bag of puzzle pieces, as Ken quickly grabs one and sets it into place> Jeff Probst: <narration> Fang workin' on the last part of their puzzle now! <The camera switches angles to show Susie, Sugar, and Bob with uneasy looks on their faces> Susie: This isn't good, you guys… <The camera then turns back to the six Kota members> Jeff Probst: <narration> Kota tryin' to catch up! <A close-up view of an exhausted Kelly is shown> It's not gonna matter… <The camera abruptly goes back to the Fang tribe> Dan: Alright, guys! Almost done! <Gillian can now be seen putting the last piece of the puzzle into place, as she raises her arms and begins to shout excitedly. Paloma and Ken are now shown. Jeff then looks down at the puzzle, before he raises his arms> Jeff Probst: <shouting> Fang wins Immunity and fire! <A victory theme begins to play, as the camera shows the overjoyed Fang members cheering and hugging each other> Gillian: <excitedly> Everybody get up here! <A close-up view of Ace, Charlie, and Corinne is shown, before the camera switches angles to show the defeated Kota tribe, still digging, and focuses in on both Crystal and Matty. A disappointed Bob is then shown, before the camera cuts ahead to show Jeff walking over to Fang with the Immunity Idol in his hands> Jeff Probst: Fang, congratulations. <A view of the victorious Fang tribe is shown, as the castaways clap> Immunity; <short pause> nobody goin' home tonight. <Jeff can now be seen handing the Immunity Idol to Ace, as an eerie shift in the music occurs> Ace: Thank you very much indeed. <The camera continues to focus on Jeff for a few seconds> Jeff Probst: Also, the other half: <Jeff now pauses, as he tosses flint towards the Fang tribe and Dan catches it> fire in the form of flint. <Michelle is shown nodding her head, as a few excited cheers are heard. The camera then goes back to Jeff again> Jeff Probst: Kota, you got a date with me at Tribal Council tonight <A close-up view of an uneasy Matty is shown> where one of the nine of you will earn the unfortunate distinction of being the first person voted out of Survivor: Gabon. <Susie, Jacquie, and Marcus are now shown with disappointed looks on their faces> You have the afternoon to figure it out. <The camera shows G.C. with a thoughtful expression on his face, and then returns to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Head on out! I'll see you at Tribal… <A clip of the dejected Kota tribe walking out of the challenge area is shown for a few seconds, before the camera zooms in on Crystal. The camera then goes back to the still-celebratory Fang tribe, as they hold the Immunity Idol up victoriously. The screen then fades out>
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Posts: 4073 (12/28/08 6:41 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Spoiler [+] Kota Tribe - Day 3 <A somber chant is heard, as the camera shows an aerial view of a winding stream and scrolls above for a few seconds, before fading out to show a herd of elephants parading through the grassland. A clip of the nine defeated Kota members returning back to their camp and hugging each other is then shown, as indistinct conversation can be heard. Matty is now shown> Matty - CONFESSIONAL: Today we had our first challenge. <The camera scrolls over to G.C., as he says "We're home now"> You know, the tribes faced off for the first time in a long line of "battles," and unfortunately Kota lost. <A disappointed Crystal can now be seen setting the yellow challenge flag down, as the camera focuses on her> Crystal: There's always the next challenge, y'all; <Marcus is shown running one hand through his hair> we just have to stay strong and do better… <The camera then goes back to Matty> Matty - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> We lost out on flint and we lost, uh, Immunity, so somebody from our tribe has to go home and <pause> nobody has any idea what to do… <A mysterious shift in the music occurs, as the camera shows a crocodile lurking in a shallow lake waters, and then fades out to show several Kota members talking in a group. Kelly and Matty are then shown walking together towards the lake, in the midst of a conversation> Kelly: <to Matty> I can't believe we have to go to Immunity Council. <Matty is now shown, as he says "I know"> It just, like, sucks… <The camera continues to focus on Matty> Matty: <to Kelly> We gotta figure out a plan of who's goin' tonight, <Kelly nods her head and brushes her hair back> cause, uh, <short pause> we definitely need to keep our strong people, I think, and <pause> we need to keep our Kelly… <The camera shows Kelly smiling> Kelly - CONFESSIONAL: I definitely have a BFF in the tribe with Matty. <Another close-up view of Matty is shown next> Um, a lot of my best friends back home are guys, plus I have three brothers so I've lived with guys; <The camera shows a wide view of G.C., Marcus, and Bob at camp> I know how to get them on my side, and <pause> I just relate to them. <The camera fades out to show a clip of Kelly and Matty both sitting on the wooden dock together> Matty: <to Kelly> Is it better to be in an alliance or not have one? <Kelly is then shown> Kelly: <to Matty> It's better to be an alliance. <The camera now turns back to Matty, as he says "Okay; I got you"> Like, seriously, I don't understand why people haven't started making any… <A close-up view of Kelly is shown again, as the camera focuses back in on her> Matty - CONFESSIONAL: I'm definitely seeing that certain friendships are getting stronger <The camera shows a clip of Susie and Crystal talking> and <short pause> maybe people'll start forming alliances because I guarantee none of us wants to be the first one voted off, dude… <laughs> <A view of both Matty and Kelly sitting on the dock together is shown again> Matty: <to Kelly> I'll watch your back, <pause> and that's honest… <The camera shows Kelly> Kelly: <to Matty> Okay; good. <Matty can be heard asking "Thumbs up?"> I'm trusting you, cause I'll come find you after this… <laughs> <Another close-up view of Matty is shown> Matty - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> Kelly's gonna stick with me on this for sure and there's only one person to, you know, point the finger at tonight to go, <The camera fades out to show Susie hanging up her pink sweater to dry> and that's Sue. <A prominent drumbeat is heard, as the camera shows Matty and G.C. both washing their shirts in the lake> Matty: <to G.C.> That challenge today sucked, dude… <G.C. is shown looking up> G.C.: Man, tell me about it. <Matty can be heard saying something inaudible> But Kelly, <long pause> uh, I think, I mean, she lost it for us today cause she stopped digging; you know what I mean? <An uneasy Matty is now shown with a contemplative look on his face> Matty: <to G.C.> Kelly's not to blame for us losing though, dude. <G.C. can then be heard asking "Who is?" as a spooky music begins to play> I think Susie's weaker by far; <short pause> in that hike, she was like dragging behind the entire time, bro, and we can't have that at all in the challenges… <Another view of a thoughtful-looking G.C. is shown next> G.C.: <to Matty> Yeah; I know what you mean… <The camera returns back to Matty> Matty: <to G.C.> As of now, that's who I'm going for, <G.C. asks "You are?"> and uh, Kelly is too… <The camera now shows a view of an elephant skull on the ground, as clouds rapidly shift around it. Crystal and G.C. are then shown talking in a jungle area> Crystal: <to G.C.> What's goin' on with you tonight? <The camera now zooms in on G.C.> G.C.: <to Crystal> Well, <short pause> are you hearin' anything? <Crystal shakes her head> Crystal: <to G.C.> No; that's why I asked you… <laughs> <Another view of G.C. is shown> G.C.: <to Crystal> The only name I heard is Sue; <short pause> I mean, I don't know if I'm supposed to tell that, <Crystal is shown with a taken-aback look on her face> but I'm gonna keep it real… <The camera continues to show a surprised Crystal> Crystal: <to G.C.> Are you for real?! <G.C. is then shown nodding his head> G.C.: <to Crystal> Yeah; for real, I heard Susie's going, man… <A prominent sound is heard, as the camera switches angles to show a fired-up Crystal with a slight smirk on her face> Crystal: Oh, hell no! There's no way in hell that's goin' down… <The camera continues to focus on both Crystal and G.C. for a few seconds, as G.C. continues to speak> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: Well, right now, the way things seem according to what I'm hearing is Matty and Kelly are talkin' to people <The camera shows a clip of Kelly, Matty, and Sugar talking> and trying to put Susie on the block. <Sugar can be seen nodding her head dramatically> Well, they haven't said two words to me so what that does that tell me about where I stand with them?! <Matty is then shown talking to Marcus> Matty: <to Marcus> We're thinkin' Susie, <A close-up view of Susie is shown, as Marcus says "Yeah"> but don't tell Crystal, dude, cause we don't trust her. <Crystal is shown again> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> You know, that's all well and good, <laughs> but <long pause> I made an alliance with Sue on Day One. Day freakin' One. So of course, you know, I'm gonna do whatever it takes to keep her in the tribe. <The camera now abruptly cuts ahead to show a clip of Crystal, G.C., and Susie talking in a grassy area> Susie: If I get knocked out this first one, I will die. <laughs> You gotta help me here, Crystal… Crystal: I'm just gonna tell you both right now, I'm writing <whispering> Kelly's name down… G.C.: <to Crystal> Who? <Another close-up view of a dramatic Crystal is shown> Crystal: <whispering> Kelly… <There is a prominent sound, as the camera shows a rapid clip of both Kelly and Matty, and then cuts back to Susie, who begins to nod> Susie: <to Crystal> Oh yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah; we gotta break those two up… <Susie can now be heard asking "G.C., are you in?" as the camera scrolls over to G.C.> Crystal - CONFESSIONAL: With Kelly and Matty, it's the dumbest alliance ever, pretty much, <laughs> because everyone in the tribe knows about it. <The camera shows Kelly and Matty both sitting in the hut together and laughing> They're like Barbie and Ken, and <pause> if you're just out here for a vacation, you're not gonna be here for very long. <The camera zooms in on Kelly, and then cuts back to Crystal, Susie, and G.C.> And, if you try to get rid of someone in my alliance, <laughs> you're not gonna be here very long, <laughs> so <long pause> my objective tonight is definitely Kelly goes home… <A clip of Crystal, Jacquie, and Marcus talking in a forested area is shown next> Jacquie: <to Crystal> So those two are an alliance? <The camera focuses in on Crystal> Crystal: <to Jacquie> Oh, those two are an alliance clear as day. <laughs> As sure as I stand here right now… <There is a brief silence, before the camera turns to Marcus> Marcus: <to Crystal> Do you have at least five votes for Kelly? <Crystal says "No"> Like, is that the general direction everybody's going or is there someone else in mind? <The camera now goes back to Crystal and zooms in on her, as she counts on her fingers> Crystal: <to Marcus> As of this moment, it's me, Susie, and G-Sizzle… <The camera shows a wide view of several Kota members talking, and then returns to a pensive Marcus> Marcus: I mean, can we all get together then and make one decision? <Crystal is shown> Crystal: <to Marcus> Let me talk to Bob, <Marcus now says "Yeah"> and I'll get back to you… Marcus: <to Crystal> I just don't want to have different people voting different ways and like, going different directions. <A view of Crystal, Susie, and Bob talking at camp is now shown> Bob: What's everybody doing? <The camera zooms in on both Crystal and Susie> Crystal: <to Bob> Okay, so <long pause> you're not going home… <Susie nods her head> Susie: <to Bob> You are staying tonight, Bob; <short pause> um, we want Kelly gone because of the challenge and because her and Matty… <Bob is then heard saying "Yeah"> Crystal: <to Bob> Anybody who thinks they have that much power in the tribe this early… <The camera shows a rapid clip of Kelly and Matty walking together, and then turns to Bob> Bob: You gotta nip it in the bud… <A side view of Crystal is shown, as she nods in agreement> Crystal: Yeah, but <long pause> my whole thing is I think we need to keep Matty. <Bob is shown with a thoughtful look on his face, as he says "No, I agree"> Bob - CONFESSIONAL: I'm not afraid to go to Tribal Council tonight, by any means. <The camera shows a wide view of several Kota members> You know, uh, I'm the oldest guy in the tribe, but <long pause> I don't feel at risk. <The camera switches angles to show another view of Bob> Um, the tribe wants Kelly to go, and I agree with that… <A prominent sound is heard, as the camera abruptly cuts ahead to show Bob crouched down by the fire pit and digging around it. Kelly can be seen walking over to him and sitting down, as he turns towards her> Kelly: Bob, um, has anybody said that they want me off? <The camera now shows Bob> Bob: <to Kelly> Yeah; <Kelly asks "Really?!"> that's all I'm hearing from everybody. They just said… <A disgusted Kelly can be seen tensing her expression, as she interrupts Bob> Kelly: <to Bob> Are you kidding me?! <Bob is shown looking up and shaking his head> Bob: <to Kelly> No; I'm not lying. I just tell you the truth… <Kelly then exclaims "That's crazy!"> Kelly: <to Bob> Who said me? Crystal and those guys? <Bob is now shown again> Bob: <to Kelly> Crystal and, uh, Susie… <There is an eerie shift in the music, as the camera shows Kelly with a thoughtful look on her face and she says "Hmm"> Kelly - CONFESSIONAL: I cannot believe Crystal right now. <The camera shows a quick clip of Crystal> Like, I definitely gave it everything I had at the challenge today so I don't know what her problem is, but <long pause> to think that I would even go home before Susie or Crystal is just not a good thing right now. <Susie is then shown again> It's not a good situation… <The camera now cuts ahead to show Matty and Kelly sitting in front of one of Kota's huts> Matty: Crystal's digging herself a hole, man, if she's goin' around to everybody, cause she's makin' herself look like more of a threat… <The camera scrolls back over to Kelly again> Kelly: <to Matty> I think she's just jealous of my looks because I'm much more beautiful… Kelly - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> You know, Crystal's trying to pull something around the tribe to get me out, <Crystal and Susie are shown walking along a forested path> so I definitely need to overcome that, you know, obstacle because I'm not gonna go home… <The camera switches angles again to show Kelly and Matty in the midst of a conversation> Kelly: Maybe we should go for Crystal because she's, like, a really strong girl… <The camera fades out to show an unsuspecting Crystal again, and then returns to Matty> Matty: <to Kelly> Dude, that would be killer. <The camera now scrolls back over to Kelly> Kelly: <to Matty> We just need to decide, um, between Crystal or Susie because we have to pick one… <'Big Bad Spirits' begins to play, as the camera shows a fast-forwarded view of the darkening sky and then fades out to show a clip of Bob, Jacquie, and G.C. packing their bags> G.C. - CONFESSIONAL: Going to Tribal Council tonight, man, I think it's gonna come down to a vote between Kelly, Sue, <Susie can be seen looking around nervously> and maybe even Crystal because some people in the tribe definitely feel threatened by her… <The camera then cuts ahead to show both Marcus and a frantic Matty talking at camp> Matty: <to Marcus> We're voting for Crystal. <Marcus now asks "It's changed?"> She's a huge threat, bro! <Another close-up view of an undecided Marcus is shown next> Marcus: <to Matty> Is that what everyone's doing now? <An uncertain Matty then shrugs> Matty: <to Marcus> Talk to Jacquie, dude… <Crystal is shown turning her head suspiciously> G.C. - CONFESSIONAL: <continued> …but at the same time, like, you never know what might happen. <The camera shows Kelly, Jacquie, Sugar, and Marcus sitting in the hut> You don't know if you're gonna come back, so <long pause> Tribal Council's scary, man; <laughs> it's a scary place to be, and <pause> I'm definitely not lookin' forward to it… <The camera shows a view of the nine Kota members walking out of camp, before the screen fades out> Last Edited By: guatemala fanfic 12/28/08 6:48 PM. 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Posts: 4074 (12/28/08 6:45 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Spoiler [+] Tribal Council #1 - Kota Tribe <'Tally the Vote' begins to play, as the aerial camera shows a faraway view of the Gabonese village Tribal Council, and then fades out to show the nine Kota members walking up the long winding path. A snake is shown slithering across a tribal mask, before the camera fades into a wide view of the main Tribal Council area, as the castaways walk in. A quick view of Jeff is shown, before the camera switches angles to show a rapid clip of Matty, and then zooms out to show all nine Kota members gathering in front of the stumps. Jeff is now shown again> Jeff Probst: Go ahead and grab a torch; <short pause> approach the flame. <A side view of G.C. is shown, as he grabs his torch> Dip it in and get fire. <The camera now shows both Matty and Susie dipping their torches into the flame> This is part of the ritual of Tribal Council because in this game fire represents your life. <A wide view of the nine Kota members gathered around the central fire is shown, before the camera cuts ahead to show Matty lifting his torch out of the flame> As long as you have fire, you're still in the game; <The camera now focuses in on Kelly> when your fire's gone, so are you. <Crystal is then shown sitting down on her stump, before the camera zooms out to show the entire Kota tribe again> That will be the case for one of you tonight… <The camera goes back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Well, welcome to your first Tribal Council; <short pause> not the place you want to be in this game. <An eerie sound is heard, as the camera scrolls across several Kota members, and then shows Sugar with a subtle smile on her face> So, <long pause> before we get to tonight's vote, let's have a little chat… <Jeff is then shown again> Jeff Probst: Susie, <short pause> how have the first three days of working and bonding been with these people that you don't know? <A close-up view of Susie is now shown> Susie: You know, everybody just kindof chipped in and chimed in and did what needed to be done as far as setting up camp; <The camera shows a clip of Bob, as he listens intently> as far as, you know, trying to make fire and find food, and I think we're having fun doin' it. <laughs> Jeff Probst: Everybody still getting along, Crystal? <Another view of Crystal is shown next> Crystal: Um, <pause> as of now, I think everybody is friends and we're all still cool, <The camera now shows Matty looking towards Crystal> but we have to play the game because we lost, <A wide view of several Kota members is shown> and we're all out here for the ultimate goal of winning a million dollars, <Marcus can be seen subtly nodding his head> so, you know, how much can you really be "getting along" when there's a million dollars on the line? I don't know… <Crystal now shrugs. There is a mysterious shift in the music, as the camera shows Kelly with a strange look on her face, and then returns to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Matty, <short pause> are you starting to see certain people talking maybe more than others? <The camera now focuses in on Matty for a few seconds> Matty: I think some people do talk more to certain people to a certain extent, <Crystal is shown with a questioning look on her face> but we're all still trying to get to know each other a little better, you know? <Matty is then shown again> I mean, there's no, <short pause> no like hardcore "alliances," but <pause> people are forming some better bonds and we're trying to become a unified tribe. <The camera switches angles to show another view of Jeff> Jeff Probst: <to Matty> Do you honestly believe there are no alliances? <The camera shows a wide view of the entire Kota tribe, before zooming back in on Matty> Matty: Yeah. <laughs> I think there's been some talk, like, about the vote tonight and who's gonna go, <A close-up view of an uneasy Kelly is shown next> but <long pause> no one's locked in, like, Final Five or anything like that; <laughs> at least I hope not… <Jeff is shown with a thoughtful expression on his face, as he gives a subtle nod of acknowledgement> Jeff Probst: Bob, <long pause> how big of an advantage is it for the other tribe to have fire? <A close-up view of Bob is then shown, as the camera focuses in on him> Bob: It's without a doubt an advantage. You know, fire's what this game's all about. <Susie is then shown with a thoughtful look on her face> You need fire to boil water; <short pause> you need fire to cook rice, <The camera scrolls over to a stern-looking Crystal> and it's frustrating that we didn't get our fire going. <The camera then cuts back to Bob again> The other tribe is probably sitting around camp; <short pause> uh, they're eating rice; they're having a good time, <Jacquie can be seen nodding her head> and so <pause> we're bummed… <The camera now switches angles to show another view of Jeff> Jeff Probst: So, <long pause> only three days and now you gotta vote somebody out. <The camera shows Kelly staring ahead> You haven't had much time really to even assess why you would keep somebody or why you'd get rid of somebody. <A wide view of the entire Kota tribe is shown, before the camera goes back to Jeff> So, Marcus, <short pause> what do you use for the criteria? What are you lookin' at in this tribe? <The camera now turns to Marcus> Marcus: I think because we're only three days in, as you said, I myself am not really looking at anything yet. <Crystal can be seen raising her eyebrows> I mean, I really am cool with everyone, so I'm just sortof thinking of all the options and the only thing that I feel like I can do at this point is to vote with the majority, <A prominent drumbeat is heard, as the camera shows G.C. turning his head> which is a bit tricky to navigate because there's no clear majority, I don't think… <Several castaways are shown, before the camera goes back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: Susie, <long pause> oldest woman in the tribe; <The camera shows a close-up view of Susie, as she nods> a lot of young, athletic people. <A wide view of several Kota members is then shown, before the camera goes back to Jeff> With all due respect, you've gotta be a little concerned… <The camera switches angles to show Susie again> Susie: Yeah; I mean, I don't know if I'm safe. <Crystal can be seen looking towards Susie> I hope I'm safe. You know, I don't want to go home tonight, <Marcus is shown gazing into the distance> but at the same time, it could happen and I'm prepared. <Jeff is now shown next> Jeff Probst: <to Susie> Would you understand, if it was you? <The camera returns to Susie> Susie: If they really thought I was holding the team back or I was gonna hold the tribe back, uh, I could kinda understand being voted off. <A wide view of several Kota members is then shown, as Matty looks up> You know, they're gonna do what they think they gotta do, <The camera focuses back in on Susie> but <pause> the truth is, there's a lot more to this game than just being strong <An eerie sound is heard, as the camera turns to Marcus> and I think there's gonna be times when you guys need a mom… <The camera now returns to Jeff> Jeff Probst: How 'bout you, Kelly? <Jeff takes a long pause, as another view of the entire Kota tribe is shown> If it's you tonight, would you understand why they would get rid of you? <The camera then switches angles to show a close-up view of Kelly> Kelly: Um, <short pause> honestly, the only reason I can think if they want to get rid of me, it's kindof hard to explain. Like, I don't even know how… <Another view of Jeff is shown next> Jeff Probst: <to Kelly> Try… <The camera returns to a thoughtful-looking Kelly> Kelly: Well, it would definitely have to be because a bunch of people are just kinda ganging up because of a threat. <A confused Crystal is shown looking towards Kelly, as she raises her eyebrows questioningly> Like, they think that I'm a strong person to win the million dollars and to win, you know, this game. <A comical sound is heard, as the camera shows G.C. laughing quietly, and then turns back to an amused Jeff, who displays a subtle smirk on his face> Jeff Probst: <to Kelly> 'Kay; that's one way of looking at it… <Crystal is then shown again> Crystal: She did not give 110% at the challenge, okay?! <Kelly can then be seen making a confused face> She didn't give 110%... <The camera continues to focus on Kelly> Kelly: Okay. You know what? I thought I tried my best, and I believe I did my best, but <pause> I guess my best wasn't good enough? <Crystal can be seen widening her eyes> But <short pause> that's fine if she wants to say that I didn't give 110% because I definitely know that I pulled my weight in the challenge, and put my all in. <A fired-up Crystal is shown again> Crystal: <to Jeff> She is weak! <The camera turns back to Kelly, who looks offended> Kelly: <to Crystal> Um, well, I'm sorry that I'm not, like, on steroids… <There is a prominent drumbeat, as the camera shows Bob raising his eyebrows, and then returns to Crystal> Crystal: <to Kelly> I ain't never used a steroid a day in my life! <An annoyed Kelly is shown> Kelly: <mumbling> Well, <long pause> it sure looks like it… <There is a brief silence, as the camera shows a wide view of the nine Kota members, and then turns back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: G.C., give me your take on what went on at the challenge… <G.C. is shown next> G.C.: We had the physical part of the challenge down, man; <short pause> you know what I mean? Like, everybody was kinda doing their part until Kelly, <A prominent sound is heard, as Kelly tenses her expression> you know, she dropped the ball for us at the end by kicking sand back in our hole and then not digging on the last gate, and we just lost too much time. <Matty can be seen running his hand along his forehead> You know, not having, um, five [six] people digging could have been the difference between us winning and losing… <Another spooky shift in the music occurs, as the camera shows Kelly adjusting her position on her stump> Jeff Probst: Matty, <Jeff pauses, as the camera turns back to him> are you at all sad about having to vote someone out tonight or is it just part of the game? <The camera shows the central fire burning and then fades into another view of Matty> Matty: Yeah; there's definitely some feelings of, uh, sadness. <An emotional Sugar can be seen nodding her head> You know, it's hard to write someone's name down and vote them out of your life basically, <Both Crystal and Susie are then shown> but <pause> we gotta play the game by the rules and the rule is that someone has to be voted off, you know? So I guess, uh, let the fun begin… <Several prominent drumbeats are heard, as the camera shows another view of the entire Kota tribe, and then zooms in on Jacquie, before scrolling over to a burning torch. The camera now fades out to show Jeff again> Jeff Probst: Okay; <long pause> well, unfortunately, one of the nine of you is about to earn the distinction of being the first person voted out. <The camera shows an unfazed Crystal staring into the distance, before fading out to show Kelly> Jeff Probst: It is time to vote. <The camera now shows another wide view of the nine Kota members> G.C., you're up. <G.C. can be seen standing up and making his way past the central fire, before the camera fades out to show a close-up view of a burning torch> <The camera now scrolls over to a tribal mask, before focusing in on Marcus and then fading out to show a clip of G.C. placing his folded vote into the urn. A side view of Bob walking up to the voting confessional is then shown, before the camera shows a view of an uneasy Kelly, and then fades out to show Susie uncapping the pen to cast her vote. The next castaway to vote is Crystal. The camera shows her arriving at the voting confessional, and then cuts ahead to show her holding up her vote: Kelly> Crystal: I just couldn't let Susie go; <A close-up view of Kelly is shown, as she stares ahead> it had to be you… <The camera shows a close-up view of a flickering flame, and then fades out to show Marcus folding his vote in half and placing it into the voting urn. A clip of Sugar is then shown, as she walks up to the voting confessional. The camera shows a snake slithering along the ground, and then abruptly cuts ahead to show Matty holding up his vote from above> Matty: I'm just tryin' to stay in the game and get as far as I can right now. Good luck. <A close-up view of a nervous Susie is shown, as the camera focuses on her for a few seconds. The camera then cuts ahead to show Jacquie picking up the pen and uncapping it. Quick clips of both Susie and Crystal are shown again, before the camera fades out to show Kelly walking up to the voting confessional, and a mysterious shift in the music occurs. Kelly is then shown holding her vote up to the camera: Crystal> Kelly: I'm voting for you because you tried to get me outta here, <The camera fades out to show Crystal staring ahead> which was a mistake because I'm definitely gonna be here for the long haul… <There is a prominent drumbeat, as the camera shows a wide view of several burning torches, and then zooms out to show Kelly returning back to the main Tribal Council area and sitting back down. The camera then focuses back in on Jeff> Jeff Probst: I'll go tally the votes. <A haunting tribal chant is heard, as the camera shows a close-up view of Crystal, and then fades out to show an uncomfortable Susie staring into the distance. Kelly is then shown with a tense look on her face, before the camera switches angles to show Jeff returning back onto the screen with the voting urn in his hand> Jeff Probst: Once the votes are read, the decision is final. <The camera now focuses back in on an uncomfortable Kelly for a few seconds> Person voted out'll be asked to leave the Tribal Council area immediately. <A rapid clip of Susie is then shown> I'll read the votes. <Jeff is shown again, as he removes the lid from the urn and sets it down on the stand in front of him> Jeff Probst: <Jeff can be seen reaching into the urn and pulling out the first vote. A view of an uneasy Kelly is then shown> First vote: <Jeff unfolds the vote, and quickly reveals it to the castaways> Kelly. <A close-up view of a tense-looking Matty is shown, as the camera zooms in on him, and then abruptly cuts back to Jeff, who already has the next vote in his hands> Jeff Probst: <Jeff immediately reveals the second vote to the castaways> Crystal. <The camera shows Crystal raising her eyebrows and gasping, as a mysterious sound is heard. G.C. is then shown with a thoughtful look on his face, before the camera goes back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: <Jeff can now be seen turning the next vote over, and revealing it> Susy. <The camera shows a close-up view of a nervous Susie, as she tenses her expression> That's one vote Susie; <Another view of Susie is shown> one vote Crystal; <The camera zooms out to show the entire Kota tribe> one vote Kelly. <Kelly is shown with a strange expression on her face. The camera then cuts back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: <Jeff pulls the fourth piece of parchment out of the urn, and quickly glances at the vote before revealing it to the castaways> Kelly . <A wide view of Marcus, Kelly, Susie, and Matty is shown, as Matty makes a confused face> Two votes Kelly; <The camera zooms in on Kelly> one vote Crystal; <short pause> one vote Susie. <Rapid clips of both Crystal and Susie are shown. Jeff is then shown again with next vote in his hands> Jeff Probst: <Jeff reaches back into the urn and pulls out the fifth vote. He unfolds it, and then reveals it> Kelley. <The camera zooms back in on Kelly, who now has a disgusted look on her face> That's three votes Kelly. <Matty is shown with a concerned look on his face, before the camera shows a confident Crystal and then returns to Jeff> Jeff Probst: <The camera now shows Jeff turning the sixth vote over, and quickly revealing it to the castaways> Kelly. <An agitated then Kelly rolls her eyes> Four votes Kelly. <A quick view of Matty is shown, as he takes a deep breath. The camera shows a close-up view of Susie again, and then zooms out to show all nine Kota members, before going back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: <The music softens, as Jeff reaches back into the urn and pulls out the deciding vote. He unfolds it, and then quickly looks down at it> First person voted out of Survivor: Gabon: <Jeff now reveals the vote to the castaways> Kelly. <Another close-up view of a frustrated and annoyed Kelly is shown, as she shakes her head> Jeff Probst: <to Kelly> That's five; <short pause> that's enough. <Kelly reaches down to pick up her bag and then stands up> You need to grab your torch. <The camera turns to show an uneasy Matty. Crystal is shown with a relieved smile on her face, before the camera shows a quick clip of Susie and then cuts ahead to show Kelly placing her torch into the slot> Jeff Probst: Kelly, <long pause> your tribe has spoken. <A prominent drumbeat is heard, as the camera shows Jeff snuffing out Kelly's torch> Kelly: I kinda knew… <The camera continues to focus on Kelly, and then cuts back to Jeff> Jeff Probst: <to Kelly> It's time for you to go… <Kelly can now be seen walking out of the main Tribal Council area without looking back at her tribemates. The camera then switches angles to show the eight remaining Kota members, before zooming in on Marcus, and then cutting back to Kelly, who fades into the engulfing darkness. Crystal is now shown with an unfazed look on her face, before the camera scrolls back over to Jeff again> Jeff Probst: Well, <short pause> you are now eight to Fang's nine, <A close-up view of Jacquie is shown, as she listens intently> but if there's one good thing about coming to Tribal Council tonight, you'll be taking your torches back to camp, <Crystal can now be seen looking up> which means you will have fire. <A wide view of several excited Kota members is shown, as they clap and cheer loudly. The camera then focuses in on G.C., as he raises his arms and shouts "Thank you, God!" Jeff is then shown> Here's you flint. <Jeff can now be seen tossing the flint to Marcus, who kisses it and then holds it up. Jeff is then shown again> Jeff Probst: Grab your torches; <short pause> head back to camp. <A wide view of the eight remaining Kota members is shown, as they stand up and grab their torches. The camera then returns to Jeff> Good night! <'Ancient Voices of Gabon' begins to play, as the camera shows a close-up view of Matty, and then zooms out to show the entire tribe walking out of the main Tribal Council area. An aerial view of the Tribal Council village is then shown, as the camera scrolls around it. The screen then fades to black> Last Edited By: guatemala fanfic 12/28/08 6:50 PM. Edited 1 times.
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Posts: 4075 (12/28/08 6:52 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	EPISODE 1 NOTES: In keeping with the tradition of the last several seasons, I'm going to go through the episode and elaborate on any parts of it that are particularly important or need further clarification. 1) Instead of only ending with a Thank You, I want to start with one too, because I've been amazed this season by the number of people who are commenting and posting in the thread already, and I hope it is a sign of things to come. It's very nice to have so many people continuing to read into season #8, so thank you so much for that! As for the schedule of this season, I have managed to get a fair amount of work done on every episode, but I don't want to post any concrete dates yet because I'll have to slow down again when school starts, but I don't see it being more than a week between episodes. Hopefully I can keep up with 5-7 days. 2) The way I did the opening this season was modeled after the real China premiere because I wanted to "introduce" everyone in a quick and efficient way, and listing their occupations was a good way to do this. I really wanted to just get right into the action, which is part of the reason I went with pre-picked tribes (plus I think they're generally more evenly divided and the pick'ems are WAY overdone now). So having them get right into their tribes was simple and took up less of the episode, I think. 3) I've talked a lot about how Randy and Crystal are big characters and you saw a lot of them just in those first few pages. I found them both of them act as good characters to keep the story moving forward, similar to narrations, just because they can really have an interesting comment about just about anything. So I used them a lot on the hike, but I also wanted to introduce some other characters here. Just from the Preview, a lot of you picked up on something between Ace and Dan - maybe a little rivalry - and then characters like Michelle, Corinne, and Susie also got introduced. I'll just say that I really liked the part with Susie and I think it suits her character in this story. Of course, her slowness on the hike also came up at the end with Matty trying to target her. More on that later… 4) The first Fang scene is pretty Dan-centric, and it's all about trying to ensure that the Fang tribe stays unified. Dan leads the "circle of hands," so is that an indication of him trying to be the leader or not? This premiere episode introduces a lot about Dan's character: we get some "ideas" to keep our eyes on (leadership, unity, confidence, etc.) And just as an aside, I've had a lot of people ask me about planning out themes and characters and stuff like that, so for them, these are the kinds of things that I'm looking at and charting in the episodes when trying to plan the story out. It will be interesting to see how these play out with Dan. Dan also makes a prediction that he thinks someone from Fang will win. Well, there's a 50% chance of that happening, so either it's foreshadowing or it's irony, so this really doesn't give anything away (yet?). The key is going to be figuring out which it is. And of course you also see cocky Ace in this seen with his comment about Tribal Council. 5) I love the first Kota scene, even though I had to cut some stuff out of it (that's why it goes right from one confessional to the next sometimes). This is a scene that's mostly about Crystal vs. Kelly. I did throw a bit of Sugar/Susie into it too, just to introduce Sugar as a positive character and to use Susie's confessional to move things along, but the focus is on building up the two characters who end up in a power struggle. Let me talk about Crystal first: I think that she is going to potentially come off OTT here, but we do get a lot of character insight. First of all, we learn about her being an Olympic medalist which is obviously going to be included no matter what. We learn that she has no experience outdoors, and she's aware that her size and her strength are going to make her someone who's automatically very intimidating. She knows she can't come off as a leader at camp (notice how she says to Bob that he's doing great and she doesn't want to tell him anything), but she says she wants to be in charge of who gets voted off. Side note: she accomplishes this, as you saw. But then we DO see Crystal being a bit of a leader at camp by pushing her tribe to work on fire, so you have to ask yourself if she's really going to be able to take a step back or not. The person who really catches on to Crystal is Kelly, who says that she's very physically strong and that Crystal will be her biggest competition in the game. This is definitely supposed to lead up to the "showdown" between them. We also hear about how Kelly thought the game would be easy and how they don't even have "a flint" as opposed to just flint. I really like how this scene connects to the end of the episode. 6) So now we go back to Fang, where we see Ace in the position of leader, directing where the fire pit goes. We hear from a new character, Charlie, who talks about the tribe working well together, even Ace and Corinne, who are definitely already established as negative forces. Since Fang started in a bit of disarray, I needed to make them seem like the positive, happy tribe at this point, because they won the first challenge. The Dan/Ace "rivalry" continues, as Randy asks Dan a question about the fire and Ace answers it instead. The rest of the scene follows the fire-building, where we see mainly Randy, Gillian, Ace, and Dan. Randy/Gillian use their glasses - Gillian comes off as a bit annoying, probably -, Ace uses meditation (although it's only a minor mention), and Dan gets the major focus. He made a bow out of his shoestrings and because he's a bit insecure and trying to prove something to himself, he becomes kindof distraught about failing to make fire. We've seen some contrast between Dan/Ace, now we get it with Dan and Randy, with Dan being positive and optimistic and Randy being negative and pessimistic by telling him it will never work. I know I've used lack of fire-making before with Earl and then Mikey/Dave to represent things like "Earl doesn't win because he can't make fire, etc." Dan definitely got similar focus, but I'm not that repetitive, so for Dan, it's not going to be about him winning or not winning the game, but it's going to represent a struggle or a battle that he has with wanting to prove things to himself and show that he's capable. He's trying to tell himself that it's okay to not get fire, but at the same time he knows he's his own worst critic. I could talk a lot about Dan, but I've already mentioned him quite a bit so I'll leave it at that. He'll be an interesting character to try and figure out though. 7) Onto the next Fang scene: this was cut down a little bit. It had more at the start of Randy talking about his tribemates complaining (specifically Corinne and Michelle - they're probably the main focus in this scene). The confessional about the water from Corinne came from my next season - I had written it up for a similar character when my next fanfic was going to be set in the Kalahari (in Africa), so I transferred it over to Corinne. I think it fit her character well enough. I just wanted to get that into a scene because I liked it. But it's still an important scene for C and M, as you'll see later. 8) The next Kota scene is pretty much focused around Crystal and Susie and you found out why this scene was necessary, later in the episode. With Crystal basically going out on a limb to save Susie, I needed to establish this relationship. As I said last season with Micronesia, any alliances that are shown in Episode 1 are pretty much guaranteed to be important, that doesn't necessarily mean they'll go far. This time, the alliance was important for the outcome of the episode. Susie saying that she'd rather not go to Tribal Council, but she has Crystal to watch her back was definitely foreshadowing of what would happen later on when Crystal rose to Susie's defense. 9) The next Fang scene is Ace telling his tribe that they should lie about starting fire. In theory, it's potentially a good idea because it will give Fang a mental advantage if Kota doesn't have fire because Kota will think Fang has one over on them. If Kota really did have fire, Fang doesn't want Kota to go in thinking Kota is better, so there's really no bad outcome for Fang in lying about it. HOWEVER, it did expose to everyone else that Ace is willing to lie and do deceitful things and it's Charlie who really picks up on this. This will be somewhat important in Episode 2. 10) Moving on to the Immunity Challenge: I always keep the first one pretty much the same as the real show. There were minor adjustments, like the bamboo crawl instead of the hitching posts, but essentially the same idea. Another thing that ended up being the same was that some of the Fang members were pointed out for taking breaks and not digging, and even before that, I knew that Kelly was going to be accused of a poor performance at this challenge and one of the things she did was not dig at the final gate (this was an added element to my Immunity Challenge though). However, instead of Kelly just getting tired and not digging, there was something interesting in the gray text in that Crystal actually pushed Kelly's hands out of the way and took over her spot. So there is room for some debate about that - yes, Kelly was going very slow, as Jeff said in his narration, but was Crystal being overly aggressive so she could later say that Kelly didn't do anything? Maybe… 11) With all the scenes I had, I wanted to make sure that there was a pretty even chance for either tribe to lose Immunity. I definitely didn't want it to be obvious, and I think both tribes got some decent development so I hope it was a challenge that you guys felt could have gone either way. Personally, for me, I thought it would seem more obvious for Kota to lose but a lot of people were predicting Fang, so that was a pleasant surprise for me. 12) [Oops, this note was from Micronesia] 13) Now we have the pre-TC strategy scene, which I really like. I think the strategy is more indepth than I've had in other premiere episodes, so hopefully it felt more like it was in the middle of the season or something. I had talked about there being a power struggle, and it was between Crystal/Susie and Kelly/Matty, with everybody else kindof in the middle. I originally wanted to have the Kelly/Matty thing come up earlier in the episode, but it ended up getting pushed back, so I started off the scene with that, and the two of them trying to act intelligent and strategic and they ended up deciding on voting out Susie because she was the weakest person. So, from there, they basically went around to all of the people in the tribe and said that they were voting for Susie. They didn't tell Crystal though, partly because Kelly was wary of her (we know this from an earlier confessional) and because they just didn't trust her. Maybe also because they could sense her closeness to Susie. They did go to G.C. though, and this was the key conversation to show more than any other. Matty tells G.C. that they're voting for Susie. G.C. obviously had some connection with Crystal that we didn't see, so he told Crystal that even though he "didn't know if he was supposed to." Note that there is a clip of Matty telling Marcus not to say anything to Crystal, which confirms that G.C. was probably given that same instruction. Anyway, because of Crystal's alliance with Susie, she says "There's no way that's happening" and she tries to turn the tables on Kelly/Matty. She already has Susie and G.C. ends up with them, which gives them 3 votes. Side note: Crystal calling Kelly/Matty Barbie and Ken didn't really mean anything romantic - it was just their similar appearance and the way they were acting together with being an obvious close alliance/friendship. That means Marcus/Jacquie/Sugar/Bob are the votes up for grabs. We see Crystal talking to Marcus and Jacquie (although Jacquie doesn't really say much), and one thing you'll notice about Marcus is that he's big on having a unified decision and he wants to go with the majority. Crystal says that she'll talk to Bob first, Bob agrees on voting out Kelly, and then Bob (wanting to be an honest player) pulls a G.C. and tells Kelly that they're targeting her. BUT, Crystal was the main person leading the campaign, not Susie, so Kelly gets upset with Crystal (who she already perceives as her biggest competition), and she suggests voting out Crystal instead. To be clear, Kelly and Matty DEFINITELY decide that they are voting for Crystal. They then try to convince Jacquie/Sugar/Bob/Marcus of this as well, and that's where the episode leaves off because I wanted it to seem up in the air, where it could have been any of Crystal, Susie, or Kelly to go. So this scene mostly revolves around Crystal, Kelly, and Matty, and then Bob and G.C. were somewhat involved in what was going on even though they both only got confessionals at the end. 14) I also really like the first Tribal Council. I think it sums up what went on in the episode really well and it touches on some important points. It's mostly the same characters that are focused on here as in the previous scene, but we also get a fairly good comment from Marcus about wanting to vote with the majority and Bob's quote about the importance of fire. I also love Kelly's line that the only reason people would vote her off is because she's a big threat to win the million dollars. Even Jeff got a little laugh at that but tried to not make it obvious. The highlight, for me though, was the Kelly and Crystal argument that erupted once the challenge was brought up. I really liked the line about steroids (no offense meant to Crystal), and I thought it was funny coming from Kelly, who I generally found to be a funny character to work with. 15) A quick note about G.C.'s answer: for some reason, when I was hearing him say this answer in my head, it flowed better and sounded better with him saying "five" instead of "six," but it was really six diggers not five that was correct, so I just put this in red brackets to show that he meant to say six. It doesn't have any hidden meanings or anything like that. 16) QUESTION: Why did Matty change his vote to Susie at the end? This will be briefly addressed in Episode 2, but due to the way Tribal Council went, Matty was pretty confident Kelly was going to be voted out. Maybe they were even told before Tribal Council what was going to happen - I'll leave that up for interpretation, but somehow, he thought Kelly was going to go. If he had voted for Crystal, you can bet that Crystal would have been pretty pissed and would have come after him. But Jeff asked Susie if she would understand being voted out and she said she would understand if the tribe really thought she was holding them back. This is what Matty thought, so he switched his vote to Susie, thinking she'd be less likely to hold it against him or seek revenge than Crystal would be. Spoiler [+] 17) KELLY AS THE FIRST BOOT Let me talk a little bit about Kelly here. The undisclosed episode title is "I'm Actually Pretty Intelligent," which is a quote from her opening confessional. The reason I left it undisclosed is because it would have clued you guys in that it was an important quote. I saw that some of you speculated Kelly would go far when I posted the Preview, but this confessional was meant to be 100% irony. She said she was intelligent and was always number one, yet she was made out to look pretty dumb in the editing (I think) and was the first person voted out - not "number one" at all. So how did I go about choosing her to be the first boot? This was one case where I had planned out a lot of other aspects of the story and she just didn't have a place in them, so I was left with only a few options for the person who could go first. I don't always plan it this way - it depends on the season. Sometimes I do the season more backwards; sometimes I do it more frontwards. But I realized that it would be a fun story for her to be the first one voted out after claiming to be intelligent, and I could make her come off as really dumb. The showdown with Crystal was also too perfect, I think. I just loved how that all played out, and after seeing Kelly on the real show, I'm glad that we got one good episode from her rather than her being mostly ignored for 6 episodes. I definitely think she was a fun character; I enjoyed writing for her, but if I kept her around any longer, she would probably have been close to what she was like on the show. I liked the edit/story I gave her. I know that there are quite a few Kelly fans reading this season though, especially GabrielP, so I want to apologize to all of you guys for having her go in Episode 1. 18) One thing I wanted to address: Astroline pointed out that I gave away a potential spoiler in saying Kelly wouldn't be completely ignored for the first 2-3 episodes. I was conscious of saying this, but what I said was true. She definitely was not ignored by any means in the first episode (she was one of the major characters), which is all I was trying to say. So maybe it was a little deceptive, but it wasn't an outright lie or anything. 19) EPISODE 2: As you can see, there is an Episode 2 preview. I'm going to try my best to keep up with previews this season, since I'm working ahead of schedule. There were quite a few things I could have chosen to put in the preview, but I went with the alliances on Fang and Susie annoying her tribe. With Fang, the Dan/Ace story is going to come into play a bit, but Charlie also gets pulled into it now. Recall his comments about not trusting Ace before the Immunity Challenge. As for Susie, she's afraid of wild animals (during her "bathroom break" she said to let her know if anyone saw a hippo or elephant) and she keeps her tribe up at night. Matty gets a confessional about it, and it's interesting because in my mind, as I write this, Matty's story is a bit tied to Susie. So I'm interested to see if you see that continuing. And of course the new Exile twist will make its appearance in Episode 2, which will be fun to see how that plays out. Usually my Episode 2s aren't as great, but I think you guys are going to really enjoy this one. I obviously haven't seen any thoughts on the premiere yet, but I'm expecting this to be a well-liked episode too, so I hope I'm not wrong. 20) Finally, I really hope that you all enjoyed the premiere, and I would once again like to offer my sincere thanks to you for reading it. I'm amazed to still have so many people reading into the eighth season (wow!). I would greatly appreciate it if you could spend a few minutes to leave some comments on the episode and let me know what you thought. Thanks in advance for all the replies! Best regards, - Guatemala fanfic Last Edited By: guatemala fanfic 12/28/08 8:11 PM. Edited 1 times.
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Posts: 4077 (12/28/08 6:56 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Comments & Polls Thank you very much for reading Episode 1 of SURVIVOR: GABON. Please spend a few minutes to leave some comments and/or predictions for the rest of the story. I certainly do not expect everyone to fill out this survey. If you don't have time to or don't want to, then please feel free to leave any comments you like (even if it's just one or two lines), or just let me know that you read the episode. Anything will help and will be greatly appreciated! COMMENTS & QUESTIONS (A) What did you think of this episode? Please be as detailed as you can, wherever possible. (B) What was your overall favorite part of the episode? (C) What would you rate this episode out of 10? (1 being the lowest; 10 being the highest) (D) Do you have any questions about this episode that you'd like to see cleared up in a future episode or at the Reunion Show? 1. SOLE SURVIVOR POLL (A) Which castaway will be the Sole Survivor? 2. WHAT'S NEXT POLL (A) Which castaway will be voted off in Episode 2? (B) Which castaway will be sent to Exile? (C) Do you have any other predictions for Episode 2? 3. POPULARITY POLL (A) Please rate each castaway's popularity from 1-10. 1 is the lowest score, while 10 is the highest. Please try to base your ratings only on the likability of the characters in my story, not how they appeared on the real show. Ace - Bob - Charlie - Corinne - Crystal - Dan - G.C. - Gillian - Jacquie - Kelly - Ken - Marcus - Matty - Michelle - Paloma - Randy - Sugar - Susie - 4. EDGIC POLL * For readers familiar with the concept of Edgic. For more information Edgic, please visit this thread: S17 EDGIC (A) Edgic for my fanfics has been very successful over the past few seasons (including choosing Tracy as Micronesia's winner from early on), so I would love to get some reader involvement in determining Edgic ratings again. Please submit your own ratings in this thread. Ratings will be compiled and I'll post the final ratings in a chart before the next episode. Rating: INV, UTR, MOR, CP, OTT Tone: NN, N, Mixed (M) , Neutral (), P, PP Visibility: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5 Ace - Bob - Charlie - Corinne - Crystal - Dan - G.C. - Gillian - Jacquie - Kelly - Ken - Marcus - Matty - Michelle - Paloma - Randy - Sugar - Susie - Thank you very much for taking the time to comment and vote in these polls. I look forward to reading your responses and I hope you all enjoyed the episode. Your feedback and comments are greatly appreciated. As always, thanks for being a part of this story! :)
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Posts: 10 (12/28/08 7:17 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	COMMENTS & QUESTIONS (A) What did you think of this episode? Please be as detailed as you can, wherever possible. I thought it was really good. I thought it had a good mix between "getting camp set up" scenes and more "character and strategy" scenes, which is important in episode 1. at all my predictions being wrong so far. And I don't think Jacquie's winning now, either, so that's another one. Oh well. I was sure that Fang would be going to Tribal Council first, so the Kota loss surprised me. I figured out it was Kelly, though, soon enough. Which is good, 'cause I like both Crystal and Susie a lot more than her. Oh, and I'm not seeing the episode 2 preview, and I believe note 12 is from last season... (B) What was your overall favorite part of the episode? The post challenge scenes on Kota. (C) What would you rate this episode out of 10? (1 being the lowest; 10 being the highest) 8 (D) Do you have any questions about this episode that you'd like to see cleared up in a future episode or at the Reunion Show? Nope. 1. SOLE SURVIVOR POLL (A) Which castaway will be the Sole Survivor? Dan. My next picks are Randy, and then Crystal. 2. WHAT'S NEXT POLL (A) Which castaway will be voted off in Episode 2? Ace (B) Which castaway will be sent to Exile? Paloma (C) Do you have any other predictions for Episode 2? Ace plays too hard, too early. Charlie/Randy/others (Gillian, perhaps) vs Ace/Michelle/Corinne, with others in the middle and lean towards the other side. 3. POPULARITY POLL (A) Please rate each castaway's popularity from 1-10. 1 is the lowest score, while 10 is the highest. Please try to base your ratings only on the likability of the characters in my story, not how they appeared on the real show. Ace - 6 Bob - 5 Charlie - 5 Corinne - 8 Crystal - 10 Dan - 7 G.C. - 6 Gillian - 7 Jacquie - 6 Kelly - 7 Ken - 5 Marcus - 6 Matty - 4 Michelle - 6 Paloma - 5 Randy - 8 Sugar - 5 Susie - 7 4. EDGIC POLL * For readers familiar with the concept of Edgic. For more information Edgic, please visit this thread: S17 EDGIC (A) Edgic for my fanfics has been very successful over the past few seasons (including choosing Tracy as Micronesia's winner from early on), so I would love to get some reader involvement in determining Edgic ratings again. Please submit your own ratings in this thread. Ratings will be compiled and I'll post the final ratings in a chart before the next episode. Rating: INV, UTR, MOR, CP, OTT Tone: NN, N, Mixed (M) , Neutral (), P, PP Visibility: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5 Ace - CPN4 Bob - MOR2 Charlie - UTR2 Corinne - OTTN3 Crystal - CP5 Dan - CPP4 (MORP4?) G.C. - MOR3 Gillian - UTR1 Jacquie - INV1 Kelly - MORN4 Ken - UTR2 Marcus - MOR2 Matty - MOR(P?)4 Michelle - MORN2 Paloma - INV1 Randy - CP4 Sugar - UTRN1 Susie - OTTM4 Hope these are right; I'm obviously new with this... I'm pretty unsure of Matty's, and Randy's tone.. Last Edited By: Hijojo 12/28/08 7:29 PM. Edited 2 times.
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Posts: 3497 (12/28/08 7:24 PM) Registered user Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	COMMENTS & QUESTIONS (A) What did you think of this episode? Please be as detailed as you can, wherever possible. First off... at this whole episode. This episode was so very funny in a lot of aspects. The funniest thing I find is that I predicted Kelly to be the first boot and it came true. I am so happy. Second of all, the irony of Kelly's quote is hilarious on so many levels. And Kelly saying that Crystal doesn't like her because of her looks... . That is something Heidi would say. Thirdly, I think you did a DEAD on job for Crystal. There is no doubt in my mind that she would have done that in the same situation. I love the Barbie/Ken quote. Fourth, I REALLY like the Susie/Crystal alliance. I think they would align in every scenario together. I am happy Susie wasn't the first boot. I like to see older women go farther than some younger ones... I think had Kelly stayed, I probably wouldn't of liked this episode. Fifth, Fang is interesting. At first I was SO SURE, Fang would go to tribal and one of Ace/Michelle/Dan would be voted out. I also thought they would be the more crazy dynamic tribe, which I think it's about a tie because both tribes are pretty different. Hopefully, there is more drama. I could go on forever about the little details but it was a GREAT episode. (B) What was your overall favorite part of the episode? Kelly calling Tribal Council... Immunity Council. I don't know if this was a typo but it was funny. . (C) What would you rate this episode out of 10? (1 being the lowest; 10 being the highest) This is the first episode, I feel deserves a 10. The standards have been pushed up a bit. (D) Do you have any questions about this episode that you'd like to see cleared up in a future episode or at the Reunion Show? None at this time. 1. SOLE SURVIVOR POLL (A) Which castaway will be the Sole Survivor? MASSIVE CRYSTAL 2. WHAT'S NEXT POLL (A) Which castaway will be voted off in Episode 2? Ace or Michelle. (B) Which castaway will be sent to Exile? Susie. (C) Do you have any other predictions for Episode 2? Fang gets a lot of drama. 3. POPULARITY POLL (A) Please rate each castaway's popularity from 1-10. 1 is the lowest score, while 10 is the highest. Please try to base your ratings only on the likability of the characters in my story, not how they appeared on the real show. Ace - 3 (His arrogance really shined through) Bob - 7 (Bob... I just liked him after this episode) Charlie - 6 (I see him emerging as a strategic player) Corinne - 6 (Not really as bitchy as she was on the show. There is still time...) Crystal - 10 (MASSIVE CRYSTAL TAKES DOWN HER FIRST VICTIM!) Dan - 7 (When reading the episode, Dan is probably going to be an early boot in his tribe or will make it all the way to the end) G.C. - 9 (G-Sizzle is pimp!) Gillian - 6 (I am happy she is fitting in so far) Jacquie - 5 (Didn't see much of her, her and Marcus seem the bulk of Kota) Kelly - 1 (I appreciate her character, but I just don't like her) Ken - 5 (Not much from him) Marcus - 5 (I see him and Jacquie becoming an alliance?) Matty - 2 (It seems that he likes to whine a lot) Michelle - 8 (Oh, her and Corinne on the same tribe is going to be fun) Paloma - 5 (Didn't get much from her. Though, she will be emerging soon) Randy - 7 (Doesn't seem overly annoyed at his tribe. Maybe he will last) Sugar - 6 (All she was, was a cheerleader. I don't see her lasting MUCH longer) Susie - 10 (I loved her!)
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Posts: 567 (12/28/08 7:41 PM) Registered user Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	COMMENTS & QUESTIONS (A) What did you think of this episode? Please be as detailed as you can, wherever possible. I enjoyed it Kelly was a good character, but I think it was good to get rid of her early because if she stayed too long she may have gotten repetitive. Dan looks very winnerish right now, but I just don't think he is, for most of the time he seemed to be narrating the whole Fang camp, and I do take the fire thing into consideration since it was mentioned in your notes, but he just seems so obvious, and with you even saying Tracy was an obvious winner last season, I dont think you would do that 2 seasons in a row. I'm glad Marcus was ignored, meaning he doesnt win :D. Randy was everything I expected him to be, which was great, and I hope he lasts longer than in the real Gabon. (B) What was your overall favorite part of the episode? Kelly, she was just funny, How many times did she say "Like"? (C) What would you rate this episode out of 10? (1 being the lowest; 10 being the highest) 9 (-1 for sad boot) (D) Do you have any questions about this episode that you'd like to see cleared up in a future episode or at the Reunion Show? Kelly: What did you think of your edit? 1. SOLE SURVIVOR POLL (A) Which castaway will be the Sole Survivor? Randy 2. WHAT'S NEXT POLL (A) Which castaway will be voted off in Episode 2? Susie (B) Which castaway will be sent to Exile? Randy (C) Do you have any other predictions for Episode 2? Someone gets voted off 3. POPULARITY POLL (A) Please rate each castaway's popularity from 1-10. 1 is the lowest score, while 10 is the highest. Please try to base your ratings only on the likability of the characters in my story, not how they appeared on the real show. Ace - 6 Bob - 5 Charlie - 3 Corinne - 6 Crystal - 7 Dan - 5 G.C. - 5 Gillian - 5 Jacquie - 3 Kelly - 9 Ken - 5 Marcus - 1 Matty - 1 Michelle - 7 Paloma - 6 Randy - 10 Sugar - 6 Susie - 6 4. EDGIC POLL * For readers familiar with the concept of Edgic. For more information Edgic, please visit this thread: S17 EDGIC (A) Edgic for my fanfics has been very successful over the past few seasons (including choosing Tracy as Micronesia's winner from early on), so I would love to get some reader involvement in determining Edgic ratings again. Please submit your own ratings in this thread. Ratings will be compiled and I'll post the final ratings in a chart before the next episode. Rating: INV, UTR, MOR, CP, OTT Tone: NN, N, Mixed (M) , Neutral (), P, PP Visibility: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5 Ace - CPN4 Bob - UTR2 Charlie - UTRP2 Corinne - OTTN3 Crystal - CPN5 (OTT?) Dan - MOR4 G.C. - MOR3 Gillian - UTR1 Jacquie - INV1 Kelly - OTT?4 (I have no idea about tone for her) Ken - UTR2 Marcus - MOR2 Matty - MOR(P?)4 Michelle - MOR2 Paloma - INV1 Randy - CP4 (I could see N, but to type for Randy he has to have some N for Randyism) Sugar - UTRN1 Susie - OTTM4
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Posts: 4078 (12/28/08 8:10 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Hello Hijojo! Thanks a lot for your comments and the episode, and for being the first to comment for this season! I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts and I reading them! :) I thought it was really good. I thought it had a good mix between "getting camp set up" scenes and more "character and strategy" scenes, which is important in episode 1. at all my predictions being wrong so far. And I don't think Jacquie's winning now, either, so that's another one. Oh well. I was sure that Fang would be going to Tribal Council first, so the Kota loss surprised me. I figured out it was Kelly, though, soon enough. Which is good, 'cause I like both Crystal and Susie a lot more than her. Thank you. I definitely try to balance camp life and strategy, especially in the early episodes so I'm glad you found there to be a good mix of those. Don't worry about your predictions not turning out right - that only makes it more surprising for you! Hopefully the Kelly boot wasn't too obvious right away though. By the end of the questions at Tribal Council, probably, but hopefully not too much before that. Oh, and I'm not seeing the episode 2 preview, and I believe note 12 is from last season... The Episode 2 Preview and Kelly's Final Words are at the end of the word document, but I forgot to post them in the thread. Thanks for letting me know that I missed note 12. I will edit it out in a few minutes. Thanks for rating the episode an 8. That's a good place to start! :) Thank you for your predictions and for filling out the Popularity poll. Finally, thank you so much for those great Edgic ratings! Hope these are right; I'm obviously new with this... I'm pretty unsure of Matty's, and Randy's tone.. You did a fantastic job, especially for somebody who is just new to Edgic. Many of these ratings are either exactly what I was going for, or extremely close. I'm very impressed! I agree that there's a bit of ambiguity with tone and I'm noticing that in some other people's posts as well, but I figured Matty would be neutral and I was leaning towards negative on Randy, but I could easily go neutral on him. Thank you again for your comments. This is a great post to start off what will hopefully be a great season. Hope you enjoy the rest of the episodes. Take care! :)
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Posts: 9 (12/28/08 8:12 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	COMMENTS & QUESTIONS (A) What did you think of this episode? Please be as detailed as you can, wherever possible. I thought the premiere episode was great. You've developed quite a few subplots, and I feel that Dan's early prediction may be right with a Fang winner as that tribe seems more complex especially with the Kelly vs. Crystal storyline on Kota ending already. Although I liked Kelly's character (and the irony of her being underestimated, although obvious once Kota lost, was enjoyable), I'm glad she left because Susie and Crystal are my early favorites. I'm glad Crystal got a lot of airtime, and I think you did well capturing her character. I wish Jacquie and Paloma had gotten more airtime, as they seemed to be players in the preview, but I expect them to develop soon. In other words, great episode! (B) What was your overall favorite part of the episode? Kelly's ironic statement at the beginning, as well as Randy/Ace's saracastic ocmments (Ace meditating to start fire/ Michelle getting lost again) (C) What would you rate this episode out of 10? (1 being the lowest; 10 being the highest) It was a great episode, and I can't wait to see the season develop. It definetely deserves a 9 and if the season continues this way, you'll defintely have some 10 episodes. (D) Do you have any questions about this episode that you'd like to see cleared up in a future episode or at the Reunion Show? None that I can think of right now (The episode comments are really helpful) 1. SOLE SURVIVOR POLL (A) Which castaway will be the Sole Survivor? Although I originally guessed Jacquie, I feel like Charlie might now be our winner. He's under the radar, surrounded by distractions already, and was strategic. (I hope Crystal wins though) 2. WHAT'S NEXT POLL (A) Which castaway will be voted off in Episode 2? Gillian (B) Which castaway will be sent to Exile? Michelle (Pure guess, but I just think it would be funny to see her try to follow a map again) (C) Do you have any other predictions for Episode 2? Ace will defintely cause conflict on Fang. He;'s too good a character to leave this soon though! 3. POPULARITY POLL (A) Please rate each castaway's popularity from 1-10. 1 is the lowest score, while 10 is the highest. Please try to base your ratings only on the likability of the characters in my story, not how they appeared on the real show. Ace - 6 Bob - 3 Charlie - 6 Corinne - 7 Crystal - 10 (Favorite already) Dan - 8 G.C. - 6 Gillian - 4 Jacquie - 5 (Not enough to go on) Kelly - 3 (As a character she was great, but I was glad to see her leave) Ken - 4 (See Jacquie (Would have been a five, but I'm sick of his whole video gamer thing)) Marcus - 5 Matty - 1 Michelle - 7 Paloma - 5 (See Jacquie) Randy - 9 Sugar - 5 Susie - 9 4. EDGIC POLL * For readers familiar with the concept of Edgic. For more information Edgic, please visit this thread: S17 EDGIC (A) Edgic for my fanfics has been very successful over the past few seasons (including choosing Tracy as Micronesia's winner from early on), so I would love to get some reader involvement in determining Edgic ratings again. Please submit your own ratings in this thread. Ratings will be compiled and I'll post the final ratings in a chart before the next episode. Rating: INV, UTR, MOR, CP, OTT Tone: NN, N, Mixed (M) , Neutral (), P, PP Visibility: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5 I had some interesting choices for a few of these. It was just how I percieved them. Ace - CPN3 (We learned about his strategy and insight into the game, but he was defintely cocky and viewed as crazy/annoying/overplaying by his tribemates) Bob - MOR2 (I debated UTR, but Bob was very present during the pre tribal scene) Charlie - CP2 (This was my strangest pick. He might be UTR/UTRP, but we definetly got into the head of Charlie on how he percieved his tribe members. He likes Dan, and defintely is a narrator who provides insight. For that I think he was more complex then his visibility suggests) Corinne - MORN3 (Corinne was negative, but not OTT/CP/UTR. She provided insight on how she would play the game, and was also seen complaining. Still she wasn't constantly complaining, and was shown to be strategical/trying to keep her mouth shut....so CP+OTT=MOR) Crystal - CPP5 (If it was possible to get a 6 in visibility, Crystal would have it. She was the narrator. She was the main strategic force. She was a massive challenge presence. Although I felt that her comments might have been percieved negative during her scheming, her opening scene was defintely positive, and because Kelly was negative, Crystal, as her opponent is who we are rooting for. Crystal is loyal, and just trying to help her friend. The negativity if any is just Crystal, and so I think she was CPP) Dan - CPP4 (We learned a lot about Dan, and despite his failing at fire, he's upbeat and smart. A front runner in terms of a winner) G.C. - MOR3 (GC was there. He's Crystal's ally and provided some narration.) Gillian - UTR1 (Gillian actually had tone, but in small doses. Her fire scene was annoying, but she provided some support. Very in depth for a 1 visibility) Jacquie - UTR1 (Not INV, but close) Kelly - MORN4 (Although possibly OTT, she did provide character insight, just not insight the reader would respect. The readers are supposed to laugh at her stupidity. Clearly a smart first boot) Ken - UTR1 (He plays video games) Marcus - MOR2 (He was a swing voter with no insight) Matty - MORN4 (He complained about Susie on the hike. He complains about Susie after the challenge. He has terrible SPV and is linked to Kelly. A weak N, but an N) Michelle - OTTN2 (Although not overly negative, she was seen as stupid with the map. The others mocked her, and she had nothing to counteract it. 1 Dimensional, and stupid is always seen negatively) Paloma - UTR1 (Nearly INV) Randy - CPM4 (The Randy we love. He's positive, he's negative. He's scheming, hes narrating, hes complaining.) Sugar - UTRP1 (Although complained about, she's still positive) Susie - OTTM4 (Wow she was very visible, but I have no clue how Susie will play this game. She doesn't want to go first, shes scared of animals, and she went to the bathroom. 1 dimensional in a sense, but both postive and negative) Extra comments: As of now, I feel Fang is more complex. A few players might be invisible, but I remember everyone (Paloma reminded us of her name, Jacquie had a few words (she loves Sugar, etc)) A lot of players stand out as possible winners, but if I had to choose an Edgic winner now, Dan, Charlie, Randy, and Matty stand out. (EDITED to change Matty to MORN4 instead of CPN4...typo) Last Edited By: FallenTorch 12/28/08 8:45 PM. Edited 1 times.
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Posts: 891 (12/28/08 8:12 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Comments & Polls Thank you very much for reading Episode 1 of SURVIVOR: GABON. Please spend a few minutes to leave some comments and/or predictions for the rest of the story. I certainly do not expect everyone to fill out this survey. If you don't have time to or don't want to, then please feel free to leave any comments you like (even if it's just one or two lines), or just let me know that you read the episode. Anything will help and will be greatly appreciated! COMMENTS & QUESTIONS (A) What did you think of this episode? Please be as detailed as you can, wherever possible. It was a great pilot episode tbh. I don't like going all descriptive, but I have to say, I think it was better than the Micronesia first ep. (B) What was your overall favorite part of the episode? Ooh. Pre-Tribal and Tribal Council for sure. Crystal/Susie VS Kelly was epic and awesome. Almost went down the same way it did on the show except there was no Susie involved (C) What would you rate this episode out of 10? (1 being the lowest; 10 being the highest) 10 for sure. It was a great premiere. (D) Do you have any questions about this episode that you'd like to see cleared up in a future episode or at the Reunion Show? Hm... None so far I guess? 1. SOLE SURVIVOR POLL (A) Which castaway will be the Sole Survivor? Crystal 2. WHAT'S NEXT POLL (A) Which castaway will be voted off in Episode 2? I'm gonna go out a limb and call out Gillian or Ace (B) Which castaway will be sent to Exile? Michelle (C) Do you have any other predictions for Episode 2? Kota wins both Reward & Immunity, it's a combined Reward/Immunity and the person sent to exile is exempt from TC 3. POPULARITY POLL (A) Please rate each castaway's popularity from 1-10. 1 is the lowest score, while 10 is the highest. Please try to base your ratings only on the likability of the characters in my story, not how they appeared on the real show. Ace - 3 (wow, what a douche) Bob - 5 (pretty boring and you know, meh) Charlie - 5 (more likeable than he was on the show) Corinne - 4 (can't say much about her, she hasn't done anything overly bitchy yet I suppose. Not a big character yet) Crystal - 10 (I loved her in this premiere<3) Dan - 6 (kinda boring and meh-ish but I liked him for calling out Ace) G.C. - 7 (so much better than he was on the show) Gillian - 4 (less annoying and she was partially ignored half the time) Jacquie - 4 (boring invisible?) Kelly - 2 (I didn't like her as much as I did on the show. She wasn't as nice without those random quotes) Ken - 4 (invisible I guess? Didn't see much of him) Marcus - 4 (mehish, invisible, focus wasn't on him) Matty - 3 (what.a.douche) Michelle - 6 (random lols and everybody second guessing her sense of direction xD) Paloma - 5 (did we even see her at all?) Randy - 7 (definitely a character that I like here better than on the show) Sugar - 5 (boring, invisible?) Susie - 8 (random laffos<3 woman who peed on their hike to camp LOL) 4. EDGIC POLL * For readers familiar with the concept of Edgic. For more information Edgic, please visit this thread: S17 EDGIC (A) Edgic for my fanfics has been very successful over the past few seasons (including choosing Tracy as Micronesia's winner from early on), so I would love to get some reader involvement in determining Edgic ratings again. Please submit your own ratings in this thread. Ratings will be compiled and I'll post the final ratings in a chart before the next episode. Rating: INV, UTR, MOR, CP, OTT Tone: NN, N, Mixed (M) , Neutral (), P, PP Visibility: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5 k I never did this before so let's try it out. Ace - CPN4 Bob - MOR2 Charlie - UTRP2 Corinne - MORN3 Crystal - CPM5 Dan - MORP4 G.C. - MOR2 Gillian - UTR1 Jacquie - INV1 Kelly - OTTN5 (? or OTT) Ken - UTR1 Marcus - MOR2 Matty - MOR4 (M?) Michelle - MORN2 Paloma - INV1 Randy - CPN4 Sugar - UTR1 (I'd give a P but everyone's giving Ns O_O) Susie - OTTM4
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Posts: 249 (12/28/08 8:22 PM) Registered user Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Comments & Polls Thank you very much for reading Episode 1 of SURVIVOR: GABON. Please spend a few minutes to leave some comments and/or predictions for the rest of the story. I certainly do not expect everyone to fill out this survey. If you don't have time to or don't want to, then please feel free to leave any comments you like (even if it's just one or two lines), or just let me know that you read the episode. Anything will help and will be greatly appreciated! COMMENTS & QUESTIONS (A) What did you think of this episode? Please be as detailed as you can, wherever possible. Very nice! I enjoyed the irony surrounding Kelly's first boot situation, I caught onto her commentary on the fire, but I didn't see it being reflected in her being booted first! Some nice development, but mainly on Kota. Ace, Dan, Corinne, Randy, and Michelle all look to be promising characters. I actually believe one of those five will be the winner; preferably Dan from what I've seen so far. Fang on the other hand seems to be either nobodies or strategists. With Bob, GC, Jacquie, Marcus, and Sugar in the former category and Crystal, Susie, Matty, and the now departed Kelly in the latter. I think Fang still needs to be fleshed out a bit, but maybe they'll have time for it to happen; however, I feel Fang is going to be shifting every episode and Kota will overshadow them as the complex tribe. However, Fang has Crystal, who is a great character! (B) What was your overall favorite part of the episode? I really liked the development of Kota, I'm surprised at how much I actually like them all, despite the negative tones surrounding some. (C) What would you rate this episode out of 10? (1 being the lowest; 10 being the highest) 8. A strong episode, but I know you have greater prepared. 1. SOLE SURVIVOR POLL (A) Which castaway will be the Sole Survivor? Dan. 2. WHAT'S NEXT POLL (A) Which castaway will be voted off in Episode 2? Susie (B) Which castaway will be sent to Exile? Bob (C) Do you have any other predictions for Episode 2? The group of Bob, Sugar, Marcus, and Jacquie will join Matty to go against weak Susie. On Kota, Gillian will probably be singled out for being the weakest member of the team, and thus, must be cut. 3. POPULARITY POLL (A) Please rate each castaway's popularity from 1-10. 1 is the lowest score, while 10 is the highest. Please try to base your ratings only on the likability of the characters in my story, not how they appeared on the real show. Ace - 6 Bob - 6 Charlie - 5 Corinne - 5 Crystal - 10 Dan - 9 G.C. - 7 Gillian - 5 Jacquie - 4 Kelly - 8 Ken - 6 Marcus - 5 Matty - 4 Michelle - 8 Paloma - 5 Randy - 6 Sugar - 6 Susie - 8 4. EDGIC POLL Ace - CPN3 (Possible OTTN3) Bob - UTR2 Charlie - MOR2 Corinne - MORN3 Crystal - CP5 (Possible OTT5) Dan - CPP4 G.C. - MOR2 Gillian - UTR1 Jacquie - UTR1 Kelly - OTT4 (possible CP4) Ken - UTR1 Marcus - UTR2 Matty - MOR4 Michelle - OTTN2 (Possible MORN2) Paloma - UTR1 Randy - CP4 (Possible CPN4) Sugar - UTRP1 (Surprised to see the N's, she gained the praise of Jacquie, and was appreciated by Susie despite her concerns.) Susie - CPM4 (Possible OTTM4) Just some thoughts based on the first episode. Top Tier (Strong) Dan, Randy Middle Tier (Possible) Ace, Bob, Charlie, Corinne, GC, Matty Low Tier (Unlikely) Crystal, Gillian, Jacquie, Ken, Marcus, Michelle, Paloma, Sugar, Susie
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Posts: 4079 (12/28/08 8:23 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Thank you so much for all of the comments. I'm surprised to see so many so fast. Just to let everyone know, you WILL get a reply to your comments, but it's going to take me a long time, so I'll be replying periodically over the next few hours. I'm really enjoying reading all of the posts! :)
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Posts: 4080 (12/28/08 8:42 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Hello YemaGrl1988! Thank you very much for your comments! I had a feeling that you would like this episode because I know you're a big Crystal fan. I really appreciate you giving the episode a 10. I feel it's my best premiere yet, but there are some even better episodes to look forward to this season. First off... at this whole episode. This episode was so very funny in a lot of aspects. The funniest thing I find is that I predicted Kelly to be the first boot and it came true. I am so happy. I'm glad it's a good and not laughing at how bad it was or something. Congratulations for guessing the first boot right - I think you also got Crystal right for one of the first two questions. (?) Glad you found the episode to be funny. Second of all, the irony of Kelly's quote is hilarious on so many levels. And Kelly saying that Crystal doesn't like her because of her looks... . That is something Heidi would say. I'm not sure if you saw in the notes, but the episode is titled "I'm Actually Pretty Intelligent," which comes right out of Kelly's confessional and adds more to the joke of her edit. Thirdly, I think you did a DEAD on job for Crystal. There is no doubt in my mind that she would have done that in the same situation. I love the Barbie/Ken quote. Thank you, and believe me there is more to come from Crystal. She is a GREAT character to be writing for. Fifth, Fang is interesting. At first I was SO SURE, Fang would go to tribal and one of Ace/Michelle/Dan would be voted out. I also thought they would be the more crazy dynamic tribe, which I think it's about a tie because both tribes are pretty different. Hopefully, there is more drama. Yes, a lot of people were thinking that Fang would be the crazier tribe, but I said for a long time that both tribes would have very interesting and different dynamics. I broke them down this way on purpose and I love the stories that go on on both tribes. This is just the beginning. :) I could go on forever about the little details but it was a GREAT episode. That makes me very happy! I appreciate your positive comments. Kelly calling Tribal Council... Immunity Council. I don't know if this was a typo but it was funny. . It was intentional, just like her saying "a flint" instead of just flint and "It's better to BE an alliance" instead of "be IN an alliance." The only thing is that I think someone said Immunity Council in Borneo, so it's not as original as I would have liked. This is the first episode, I feel deserves a 10. The standards have been pushed up a bit. Thanks. I've really put a lot of effort into this season and I'm trying to make these episodes the best yet. I really appreciate you giving it a 10. :) Finally, thanks for your predictions and for filling out the Popularity poll. Corinne - 6 (Not really as bitchy as she was on the show. There is still time...) Really? I thought she got into it pretty quickly. It was almost half the season before she got a bitchy/N episode on the real show. But no worries. There is more bitchiness to come from her. Gillian - 6 (I am happy she is fitting in so far) Sadly, I wasn't able to fit much of her into the episode, but there is more to come next week. Marcus - 5 (I see him and Jacquie becoming an alliance?) Yeah; I was trying to hint at this very subtly. Good for you for picking up on it. Susie - 10 (I loved her!) Glad to hear it. At least she wasn't ignored like on the real show! :) Thank you again for all of your comments. They were a pleasure to read and I'm glad you enjoyed the episode so much. Hope you enjoy the rest of the season and have a great night! :)
guatemala fanfic	Reply to SFC	#2160	[-]
Posts: 4081 (12/28/08 8:55 PM) Reply Quote More Recent Posts Message Connection Block Invite	Hello SFC! Thanks a lot for your comments on the episode, and for replying so quickly. I remember that you were always one of the first to comment. Also, just to let you know, I plan on reading much more of your comic tomorrow, so I'll PM you more comments then. I enjoyed it Kelly was a good character, but I think it was good to get rid of her early because if she stayed too long she may have gotten repetitive. Thanks. This was what I thought about her as well. It was either get one good episode out of her or give her a few episodes where she wouldn't have been as great and you're exactly right, she would have been repetitive. I think she was a fun character... for one episode, so that's all I could do with her. Dan looks very winnerish right now, but I just don't think he is, for most of the time he seemed to be narrating the whole Fang camp, and I do take the fire thing into consideration since it was mentioned in your notes, but he just seems so obvious, and with you even saying Tracy was an obvious winner last season, I dont think you would do that 2 seasons in a row. Whether he wins or not would have nothing to do with the fire. But just to throw some reverse psychology out there, the best thing would be for me to do another more obvious winner because everyone is looking for something else and if no one expects the obvious winner to win, that makes them less obvious, right? Aras, Yul and Earl won back-to-back season with similar edits, so it's certainly not out of the question. I'm glad Marcus was ignored, meaning he doesnt win :D. Randy was everything I expected him to be, which was great, and I hope he lasts longer than in the real Gabon. Marcus got some significant development though - just not a lot of it, but yes, the lack of a confessional probably isn't good. Glad to hear you enjoyed Randy as a character. Like Crystal, he's fun to write for. Kelly, she was just funny, How many times did she say "Like"? I have no idea how many times. She said "definitely" a lot too, I think. 9 (-1 for sad boot) Thanks for the 9. That's a great start. Hopefully there will be no more sad boots, then. :) Kelly: What did you think of your edit? Thanks. I will definitely ask this or something related to it. It might be more along the lines of was her edit accurate or something like that. Thank you for your predictions and for filling out the Popularity Poll. Matty - 1 I remember you saying he'd be the worst possible winner, so hopefully he doesn't win. I'm guessing Marcus is the second worst for you. Excellent job on your Edgic ratings. As always, they are very close to what my intended ratings were. Kelly - OTT?4 (I have no idea about tone for her) I had her just as OTT neutral, but I'm not against a negative. I'll see what other people do first. Randy - CP4 (I could see N, but to type for Randy he has to have some N for Randyism) Yeah, this is what I thought to. I was leaning a bit towards negative, but I'm not sure if there's anything explicit that seals me going in that direction. It could definitely end up being neutral. Thanks again for your comments. I really appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts. Hope you have a great night, and enjoy the rest of the season! :)

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